Four-leaved clover

A fancy poem.. for a love that i never got..

Do you remember the day we first met?
you were dressed in a sparkling blue
a dash of green with a hint of pink
it was too good to be true.

The smile when you said "hi" was so cute
i could have given anything for it
i could have sky-dived without a parachute
and not regret it, not one bit.

Days rolled by and years passed
you became my four-leaved clover.
how could i have known at that time
that soon it will all be over?

One fine day you walked up to me
and said that you weren't well.
you looked pretty fine and i did not see
how could i possibly not tell?

The sun grew dim and the lights went out
i was left weeping on the street.
my friend was gone, my love dethroned
i couldn't get back on my feet.

I know i never was the person you wanted
but i didn't want it to be over.
i still miss you at night and cry to god
give me back my four-leaved clover?

Reviews

[Michael X]

hm, I'm done by the 4rth line, not to sound cold, the title is
complicated Just say Four Leaf Clover.. what is "Four-Leaved"..
Anyhow this reads like a diary entry or a letter to a friend.
I mean from what I read. anyhow, keep em coming its great practice.

[Mary]

very sad

[TTBoy28]

Blackdragon -
A pretty good start to a great poem. You just need to add a little bit more...maybe a stanza about what you and your four-leaf clover did together. Then, you can start your descend. Again, good start.