Magic Places

Deep in the heart of the forest

where the world is frozen like the grave

a white frost hovers

clinging to everything

I wander here

in this world frozen white

my breath freezing

in the icy air

            as I walk beneath this frozen cloud

it rains diamond like pearls

back down onto my dark hair

where they cling like semi-precious jewels

with every step frozen twigs snap

startling the tiny birds

peeping in the naked tree limbs

the ground is rock hard

white and so like the face of death

it is cold, so very cold

icicles hang from the ancient trees

like frozen waterfalls

the forest is nature quiet

I move along on my wandering path

alone yet not alone

for behind me are my shadows

large owls on silent wings

following my every movement

they bring their magic to this forest

and I can't help wondering

is it their spell that I am under

or perhaps it's the forest that holds me captive

Reviews

[felioness]

I am absolutely enthralled with this write, however the repeat of the word "like' is a bit off putting:
like the grave
diamond like pearls
so like the face of death
icicles hang from the ancient trees
like frozen waterfalls

occasionally "show" rather than tell eg.such as:
icicles hanging from the ancient trees
are frozen waterfalls ...

that aside you created vivid and surreal images that captured my heart and I fell in love with this piece despite of the over use of "like"

[Black Cat Fever]

Thank you. Appreciate your helpful comments.

[R. L. Hill]

Beautiful! I saw the steam of my own breath as you took me through a magical, frozen place: An Icy Wonderland

[Black Cat Fever]

Thank you very much!

[Sami Khalil]

it is cold, so very cold

icicles hang from the ancient trees

like frozen waterfalls

the forest is nature quiet

I move along on my wandering path

alone yet not alone

[Black Cat Fever]

Thanks most kindly.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)...................

[Sami Khalil]

You are very talented...Keep up these wonderful poems...:)......................

[Black Cat Fever]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......................

[Susie Q]

You paint an awesome picture of winter in the forest of nature & wildlife. You captivate with the image of shadows like large owls on silent wings following every movement. Very nice write!

[Black Cat Fever]

Thanks so much!

[Susie Q]

As always, you are welcome friend. I enjoy your poems.

[Enid Blake]

Very descriptive, I could feel that icy chill through your words.

[Black Cat Fever]

Thank you very much!

[Coyote Song]

A very enchanting poem. The winter landscape is beautiful as well s the spell whether from the following owls or the forest itself. I sure enjoyed this!

[Black Cat Fever]

Thank you! thank you!

[Wicahpi]

Winter wonderland is soon upon me, too, but not yet. Summing it up like this takes out the bitter of cold and brings in warmth of sun, so to speak. I've always enjoyed the flakes of snow upon one's hair; the way the sunlight dances there. Lovely little poem!

[Black Cat Fever]

Thanks! It's so very nice to hear from you!!!
You are missed. Glad you're not gone.

[Wicahpi]

Not gone, just no unlimited Gig use at this time, so maybe next year! Limited Gigs hurts my creative juices, but more gigs hurts my wallet right now. Hard times!! I miss you gals, too!!

[Tina Kline]

Your words describe a very beautiful frozen world that is full of magic. Who could resist the spell of wild places that are lovely and haunted at the same time as this place seems. I enjoyed this a lot!!

[Black Cat Fever]

Thank you!