Erin

I keep her love on a silver chain

Beneath the words that kept her brave

She keeps me safe from all the pain

Without lifting bow or blade

I used to keep her promises displayed on my hand

Now they rest

Against my breast

When I’m a sinking ship, my ring is dry land

I really shouldn’t close my eyes behind the wheel

But when I think of her, I don’t see; I feel

When I look into her eyes

It’s like when all you can see is sky

Even though they’re dark as pitch against the snow

It’s that feeling of exhilaration, that only seems to grow

She kisses me and a lion roars inside my soul

She grasps my hand and my half is whole

There are acres and acres of four leaf clovers growing where she touches me

And every last rainbow ends wherever she might be

Author's Note

Thanks to my friend Matthew for sitting with me for hours and helping me edit this before sending it to my inspiration for this poem.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

I have no words....my voice is in my awe!! ("I can feel the love tonight"). Well done!

[Rachel Richardson]

Thank you so much! :)

[mercy party]

the poem feels very sturdy, if that makes sense. i like how in the poems small compartment you were able to create a quick origin story. It was cute too, the part where you graduated from writing on hands to keepsakes.

[Rachel Richardson]

Thank you!!!

[Bare trees]

The interchanging words are fine and make sense to me either way.

This is obviously about a profound love that has affected you in the best ways. Your opening lines speak of a silver chain and I've noticed you're wearing a silver chain in your picture. I'm guessing this may relate to a religious locket.

There are many good lines in this and I commend you and Mathew for the time you put in to it. Whether my interpretation is right or wrong, you both did a fine job.

[Rachel Richardson]

Thank you for your review! Good eyes, by the way! The necklace in that photo is the very one of which I speak. I keep my ring on my chain too and I'll send you a message as to why because it relates to the poem. The poem was meant for my partner and so she got the reference but I suppose it should have occurred to me that if you didn't know the story, you might skip right over that part.

[Rachel Richardson]

Just another note, trade "when" for "though" in "even though they're dark as pitch against snow". I think it makes more sense that way. If it doesn't, let me know. If it DOES, let me know.