Blue Kite

Scattered on the WIND,

He flew high,

With SOUL broken in half,

His FEATHERS crumbled one by one,

He stretched his HANDS,

Cried for a SAVIOUR,

No one noticed his PAIN,

His face a MASK of Venice,

No one KNEW! 

Until it was too LATE,

He fell from the SKIES,

Disappeared from SIGHT,

This TRAGIC act

To be witnessed by only one

BLUE

 KITE.

Author's Note

;)

Reviews

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I liked the metaphors you used, as well as the colors. Beautiful and melancholy.

[deeps]

This is wonderful. I really enjoyed this piece it's very creative

[cfix]

This is amazing, love the metaphors used in this. Like the colors used to express the words used. Well done!

[jazmin]

I loved it, it....spoke to me i guess :p. It was beautiful.

[Kaitlyn]

"His FEATHERS crumbled on by one"

Did you mean one by one?

Other than that i absolutely love this poem. Very good. :)

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this is a very beautiful metaphorical piece
with wonderful emotions and sly narrative.
~the imagery is wonderful~ excellent poem :)

:)

[Linear]

Such a lot of pain in your poem, flying so high where everyone should be able yo witness his/her pain, yet no one does except the lonesome blue kite. excellent poem

[Arsenic Nemesis]

I really like this a lot, very creative and well written, a nice piece here - very well done. I loved the last part "To be witnessed..." very powerful indeed, keep up the good work!~

[+Naomi+]

love it.
Poor little kite, I feel bad for him now...

[how.girls.get.clean]

really good! it has really good description. With SOUL broken in half,
His FEATHERS crumbled on by one,
AMAZZING!