Destruction of Dreams and Thoughts

my 1st english poem....funny but wasn't such funny at that time :)

Dream came thinking your eyes

Rain came alone

Morning came with new sunlight

When darkness had gone.

 

You came in solitude

With the smell of flowers

That’s like cool busy wind

In my painful hours.

 

Love came in my thirsty days

When I was in vain

Love came as you my dear

In sunlight,in rain.

 

Emotion came to understand you

When you were my aim

A crazy,blowy wind cut me off

From the life’s game.

 

Tears came after many of years

Bursting my heart and these stony eyes

What life gave me,all of those left

Fortune created a drama with me----lo how nice.

 

At last the boat reached the bank

Going through all kinds of hurt

Now I know,love is only seen outside

There’s only fire in heart.

Reviews

[Sanchari]

True words from a dejected and lonely soul, doesnt sound funny at all. And if it's ur 1st english poem , it couldnt get better than this. The "you" in ur poem , i.e. the object of your love and the way u linked it with nature was quite impressive.

[BLACK PANTHER]

thanks for reading all of my poems...waiting for ur next this time.

[Sanchari]

that was kind of u.
yes will update it soon... will take some time.