Widhewo Ponderings

Please! Please!
I beg you take nothing more

First my innocence, then my pride
What is loving without them

Death has stepped into me
And I have entered death

My soul is now empty
Being separated from my darling

Screams of sorrow do not have a voice
For what is already gone

Mind and body are in a state of lack
Destitution has taken over

There is a vacancy in my spirit
Dissolved into a void

The shake of this image which burns me
Is all I have left

Haunted by sweet memories
Of a time long past

Is it that which I refuse to let go?
Or it is just a glimpse of what could have been.

I don't have all the answers
But I beg you take nothing more

 

"Valentine of Milan Mourning her Husband, the Duke of Orléans" by Fleury-François Richard.

Author's Note

European widhewo, meaning �to be. empty, be separated,� to be �destitute� or. to �lack�.
This piece has been a long time in the writing, after a dream last night I knew it was time to finish it.

Reviews

[forfila]

I like it Bren, but it is so sad. I don't know if I am ofline here, but the imagery and the poem kind of reminds me of a promised destaination between two lovers that was never reached,,,so sad :(
But it also sounds as if the two are still in contact but have healing to do, am I on the right track?

Either way, very beautiful..

Love
Me

[Brianna Brie]

Wonderful write...it kind of reminds me of Job's ramblings...woe is me. You made me feel what she feels. Her separation and that feeling of being destitute. Emotional piece.

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This hit me right in the keister! So many are feeling this way, what is wrong with this picture? Everything important has been thrown in the trash can...it is more than likely retrievable, but it will always be tainted with left overs...no matter how hard you try to get rid of the pain, it will rear its ugly head again and again. The option I would take is the most difficult but the most effective Bren...LET GO...for the very sake of the void in your spirit and your self-respect...
Good luck xx
Helen xx

[justjenn_2u]

Is it that which I refuse to let go?
Or it is just a glimpse of what could have been

My favorite line of this poem! A well written question, at that. Too often this question sounds in my head and for the life of me, I can't find an answer to it.

I felt your plea in this piece. Very enjoyable.

[shadadakiya]

well i have been there so i know what you are saying here when you feel you have lost everything that meant anything to you then you really feel dead and really don't want to live,great write .hugs*

[Tania Leigh]

"Death has stepped into me
And I have entered death"

Incredible line. I never heard the word "widhewo" before...it is fascinating.

This poem is truly haunting....very well done, Brenda!

[TL Boehm]

i love the form of this, each couplet stands alone as a moment in relationship lost - yet bound together poetically - they are incredible... well done.

[Robert Luna]

Your use of words is an art form in itself. You travel so gently with such a sad emotional piece. Having to feel the lost of one's self in a way. Having a part of yourself taken away to only leave feeling incomplete and lost. I think you captured this feeling and thought perfectly. The heart of a being so pure when in love and finding it taken from them lays here in these words.


Great Job!!!!!!!

[Y.F.]

There's a great effort by the speaker to explain herself (it's not necessarily gender specific, but I'm basing this on the picture), to show how much she is broken inside and can't bare anymore of what she considers abuse by whom she speaks to.
Very powerful piece, filled with strong emotions of pain and self-loss.
Thank you for sharing this with us.

[Phil Sanders]

Superb .. and goes with the painting so well ...