Roberty Bobbity

A little poem my grandfather use to tell us that I rewrote and added to a little.

Roberty Bobbity big belly Ben
Eat as much meat as four score of men
A cow and a calf
A hog and a half
Forty more feet of johnny cake
Waiting for it to bake
And a chunk of cheese
If you please.
 
Roberty Bobbity big belly Ben
Had three daughters and then two again
First Juanita and Bernita
Thirdly sweet Geneva
Then with June came Robbie Jane
Five fair maidens in his reign
Roberty Bobbity big belly Ben
  Now is fighting off four score of men!

Reviews

[there is no more from m..]

amazing

[justjenn_2u]

What a wonderful nursery rhyme type poem. This piece also reminds me Shel Silverstein's writings. Very well worded. I enjoyed.

Thanks for sharing.

[An Ordinary Woman]

LOL, How precious! That is so wonderful, I love that , how fun!

[Constance]

This is cute! A wonderfully youthful rhyme. Thank you for the moment of smiles. I enjoyed this.

[Mark Pearce]

A nice rythm.

Old style, nusery verse is powerfully lasting. That's why I've allowed myself to venture there as well.

[Gildamare]

Better. Still a little squirlly at "forty feet more of johnny cake..." Perhaps we need some punctuation to rest between 'half' and 'forty', and perhaps it should read "forty more feet..."

The last two lines are also a little weird, and since this is the end, it really need to have a solid punch. Bonnie & bounty don't rhyme, which is a problem. Also, I was reading about all his daughters, then suddenly his Bonnie (wife/girlfriend) & his "bounty", which made me say, "wait, what?".

[Gildamare]

You lose the meter a bit at "forty feet..." and "time to rest..."

Otherwise this was great. Do you write these for children?

:)mazy

[Blackbirdsong]

Beautifully penned. Wonderfully written rhyme. I can tell you had a lot of fun writing this.

[Y.F.]

Definitely a fun one. :)
Reminds me of the poems my nephews like to listen to.
Very unique flow - very playful.
An interesting read.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

I love this! Quite a snappy rhythm to it! And a heck of a lot of fun! Thank you! Put a smile on my face for sure!