Jack Wears Black

For a contest, my first try at limerick.

 

There once was a fellow named Jack

 

Who dressed from head to toe in black

 

Bleach fell in the wash strong

 

Making Jack sing his song

"Dye me jeans, Dye me shirts, Mrs. Mac"

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

light and fun....great job with your first limerick.

[Emily Elizabeth]

Catchy, funny and light-hearted! A really nice piece, one that's thoroughly enjoyable. Thank you for sharing!

[James K. Blaylock]

I really enjoyed this piece.

jkb

[Taja B.]

How catchy and humorous! I really liked the rhythm altogether, even though I do have a small suggestion.

Maybe you should reword "In the wash fell bleach strong." For some reason, it doesn't sound right and the flows kind of stumbles right here.

But besides that, I really enjoyed this limerick and this is really good for a first try.

Thanks for sharing. And congrats on winning the contest by the way!

[Chillbear Latrigue]

How retro. Very clever. Reminds me of my ex doing my clothes.

[Emily B]

How playful, I smiled as I read it. So much fun!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

LOL.. Jack is no longer all in black.. very fun to read..

Chloe
xoxo

[Amanda Crandall]

heh very playful, and a fun limerick

[justjenn_2u]

Catchy little rhyme. Could possibly be a new age nursery rhyme. : ) Made me smile!!

[Catrinka]

This one made me smile Bren - cute!! Excellent first try I must say!