Blur the Lines of Reality

For a contest

As the room grows dark, everything is a total blur
From this world I embark as I hear a murmur.
There's a hidden force working within my mind boldly,
That is seeking to blur the lines of reality.
I have lost all control as I begin to think
This will be my new goal, no more will I drink!

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

I think a lot of people go through that (sometime more than once) a great write!

[None]

Great write and so precise. Wishing you all the best in the contest! Maybe you can spark an interest from AA for this as well!

[Jacqueline]

Impressive and realistic. I felt your message and you said alot with few words.

[Jet Lag]

you got my vote!

[Cece]

i felt that blur
the fading row of lights
as i was rolls down
the corridor of ER

under the influence
under my own hand
i had expected the end

i now have new therapy
the writing which relieves
the stresses that i feel

[Phil Sanders]

We've all been there .. smiling ....

[E. M. Murren]

Very nice work. I liked this a lot... a moment in time offered to us as a life changing experience. Well done.

[Y.F.]

We've all been there.
Nicely written.

[Amanda]

that is so funny, in a way! i knew the feeling well...i don't anymore since i stopped.

good desciptions...good job!


Good Luck,

Amanda =)))