The Agony of Silence

A transatlantic collaboration by Phil Sanders and Brenda Sue. (Navy is Phil and Wine is Brenda)

She doesn't understand ...
My life has changed
My needs are varied like the winds of time ...
Taking my heart to new beginnings ...
Different desires ...
The past lies buried in the ground ...

He doesn't understand...
Life has changed me
Together, alone, in this prison we call home...
Fantasies have become my only escape...
Always exhausted...
My heart dreams of days gone by...

She doesn't understand...
Frustration abounds...
I am locked into suburban boredom
My mind is dulled and my passion doused
A sensual frozen waste...
My soul is frozen and bound...

He doesn't understand...
The magic is gone...
A special touch, a loving look, our favorite song...
Could make so much difference...
Passion renew...
The future looks dim unless I get through to him...

She doesn't understand...
Her kisses infrequent and cold
The touch like winter and snow
I need the fire igniting again ... my body aroused
Tired and lonely
My heart screams for love...

He doesn't understand....
Loneliness lurks...
I need him to hold me, not scold me
Imprisoned by duty's chains...
Vague memories of young love...
Vanished like a dream lost in the night...

We don't understand...
What happened to us
We're living the life of our parents...
Doing what we said we would never do
Him in one corner, her in another...
Where has the magic gone?

SILENCE..........................................

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Navy is Phil and Wine is Brenda, Gray is what both are thinking.

Reviews

[E. M. Murren]

Your individual passions burn so brightly in this work that melded thus the reader is mesmerized while identifying with the sentiments. You have defined the problem in so many relationships so well. The goals to acheive as well as the mountain which each needs to terain. Fabulous work.

[Sparrow]

Heartbreaking frustration. How many of us have been in a place like this?

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Some good points: appeals to basic human truths = always a strength
Easy to relate, but is the reader excluded from the monologues?
I thought there wasn't full integration, and it wasn't easy to empathise

Some of the expression is very average. For example:
'She doesn't understand ...'
'My soul is frozen and bound...'
'My heart screams for love...'
Not particularly original means of communication. For me this is the single biggest prob

Sorry but I don't think this is very good
(BTW, I don't use the 95% system, so 30% is actually an average score)

[Midwest Chick]

Wow. That is summarily awesome! I can totally relate.

[Jenny Davis]

This is a great collab! I think many married people can relate to this because we get tired of the routine and what's funny is one is thinking like the other, yet no one wants to talk about it....excellent write :)

[Carole]

Beautifully done Brenda & Phil! You never would have known two people wrote this...I love the two perspectives coming from two different angles and yet intertwining so perfectly.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Great collaboration. I understood this completely. Nicely done to you both.


Great Write
Rayne

[An Ordinary Woman]

I read this and loved it, I understood it completely as one who has been there and knows ...

This is a wonderful write, good job!

[DecemberXSunset]

How could people get the two colors wrong? It's obvious who is saying what. It is referring to the opposite person.

It's a very true poem, of how people let their love fade, they do less to show each other who they put first.
Time goes on and little actions go misunderstood.

You can plainly tell that the two are still in love, they just don't know how to open that connection back up.
Beautiful work
-Ashli-

[Sqeaver]

A good write.

[Isaiah Jay]

good writing....