The Agony of Silence

A transatlantic collaboration by Phil Sanders and Brenda Sue. (Navy is Phil and Wine is Brenda)

She doesn't understand ...
My life has changed
My needs are varied like the winds of time ...
Taking my heart to new beginnings ...
Different desires ...
The past lies buried in the ground ...

He doesn't understand...
Life has changed me
Together, alone, in this prison we call home...
Fantasies have become my only escape...
Always exhausted...
My heart dreams of days gone by...

She doesn't understand...
Frustration abounds...
I am locked into suburban boredom
My mind is dulled and my passion doused
A sensual frozen waste...
My soul is frozen and bound...

He doesn't understand...
The magic is gone...
A special touch, a loving look, our favorite song...
Could make so much difference...
Passion renew...
The future looks dim unless I get through to him...

She doesn't understand...
Her kisses infrequent and cold
The touch like winter and snow
I need the fire igniting again ... my body aroused
Tired and lonely
My heart screams for love...

He doesn't understand....
Loneliness lurks...
I need him to hold me, not scold me
Imprisoned by duty's chains...
Vague memories of young love...
Vanished like a dream lost in the night...

We don't understand...
What happened to us
We're living the life of our parents...
Doing what we said we would never do
Him in one corner, her in another...
Where has the magic gone?

SILENCE..........................................

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Navy is Phil and Wine is Brenda, Gray is what both are thinking.

Reviews

[E. M. Murren]

Your individual passions burn so brightly in this work that melded thus the reader is mesmerized while identifying with the sentiments. You have defined the problem in so many relationships so well. The goals to acheive as well as the mountain which each needs to terain. Fabulous work.

[RareRed]

So sad and true and yet so beautifully put together....thanks for sharing!

[Jayne Ann Saporito]

This is the most honest, sad and true commentary on relationships I have ever read. I'm sure most of us have stood in this place. An excellent writing!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is just so very sad and so very true about many people.. when does the magic go away?
You two wrote this well together and it came out perfectly... Such a sad and heartfelt poem .. loved it , though i am sorry for the two in this poem ,,

Chloe
xoxo

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Wow. I like this! Like Fred and Ginger, you guys rock! Excellent write!

[AK]

It's remarkable to see both perspectives of a broken relationship represented so perfectly. Could reigniting the passion and excitement be as simple and as obvious as it seems here? Maybe so...

[JC Fox]

This was an interesting collaboration great job and thanks for sharing it with me :-D

[Thomas Allen Erb]

This is fantastic! Powerful words that strike close. It speaks to many of us!.
As a song writer as well as a fiction guy, this could be a great song as well!
Good job!
-Tom

[Phill Oz O'fee]

An intertwining of creativity between two minds producing a singular unique and fascinating composition. The marriage described within the text may not be working, but the word play and structure between the corroborating writers is spot on!

Excellent piece!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Glenda M. Carter]

Very nicely done. So very true that we fear breaking the silence to share what we really 'feel' all the while wishing the other would magically understand what we need. I think the use of "He doesn't understand" and "She doesn't understand' works here because these very phrases are often a repetitive part of our human experience as we live in our own world of silence.
I did get a little lost when you switch to "We don't understand" simply because you have used color coding. Who is speaking here?

[Sara]

it would be so disappointing to lose something so precious as young love, and to become something you promised you would never be...and you showed this disappointment and frustration impeccably.
great write!
-sara