The Agony of Silence

A transatlantic collaboration by Phil Sanders and Brenda Sue. (Navy is Phil and Wine is Brenda)

She doesn't understand ...
My life has changed
My needs are varied like the winds of time ...
Taking my heart to new beginnings ...
Different desires ...
The past lies buried in the ground ...

He doesn't understand...
Life has changed me
Together, alone, in this prison we call home...
Fantasies have become my only escape...
Always exhausted...
My heart dreams of days gone by...

She doesn't understand...
Frustration abounds...
I am locked into suburban boredom
My mind is dulled and my passion doused
A sensual frozen waste...
My soul is frozen and bound...

He doesn't understand...
The magic is gone...
A special touch, a loving look, our favorite song...
Could make so much difference...
Passion renew...
The future looks dim unless I get through to him...

She doesn't understand...
Her kisses infrequent and cold
The touch like winter and snow
I need the fire igniting again ... my body aroused
Tired and lonely
My heart screams for love...

He doesn't understand....
Loneliness lurks...
I need him to hold me, not scold me
Imprisoned by duty's chains...
Vague memories of young love...
Vanished like a dream lost in the night...

We don't understand...
What happened to us
We're living the life of our parents...
Doing what we said we would never do
Him in one corner, her in another...
Where has the magic gone?

SILENCE..........................................

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Navy is Phil and Wine is Brenda, Gray is what both are thinking.

Reviews

[E. M. Murren]

Your individual passions burn so brightly in this work that melded thus the reader is mesmerized while identifying with the sentiments. You have defined the problem in so many relationships so well. The goals to acheive as well as the mountain which each needs to terain. Fabulous work.

[Brian K. Walters]

I thought I had already revied this once but I can't see the review posted so here goes...

This poem is tragically realistic. I think most people who have lived with someone for a long period of time can relate to this write far too well. In a perfect world relationships would start with a bright, warm flame that continues to get hotter and brighter as time goes on. Usually it doesn't.
The couple you depict in this write must now face how to relight the fire before the smallest flame blows out. Too often, people think it's easier to look for a new fire. It's not.
Both people here are searching for the same result. The lack of communication keeps getting in the way. Personally I think the reason this happens is this.. In the beginning of a relationship people want to relay who they are and what their wants and dreams are. More importantly, they listen to each other. As time goes by in a relationship, we take for granted the other person knows what we want and we know what they do.
Thank you for bringing this to light in your writing :)

Brian

[PureSyn]

What an incredible write by you two. I love collaborative pieces...the blending of minds and voices. This is a very poignant write, one that describes the plight of many couples. When communication ceases...each suffers in silence. I can so feel the ache in this piece! Excellent write!

Nicole

[Kip]

A nicely done collaboration... works very well. Each stanza comes off as 'ironic' in the context of the previous offering from the opposing viewpoint.

[Joseph - Michael]

That's true how every relationships would think when the moment come in crashing like that...

On the other hand, it's a well written and I enjoyed it...

[Kristin Brecoe]

Nicely done collab. However, I think all those periods at the end really brings down its maturity. Keep it the simplke three dots. It makes it look better.

and I liked the sory btw.

-Kristin

[Janyce Helen Van Es]

Damn! This is my life exactly. What an eye-opener. Thanks!

[Robert Luna]

Wow you guys really worked wonderfully together here. The flow and pace of the words seemed so free and purposeful. I really enjoyed this and think you guys painted this scene of life so perfect one that no one wishes to have but so often finds themselves trapped in.


Great Job!!!!!!!

[C.B.]

I do love the passion of this piece, ironic because it is about the loss of passion. I love how you incorporated both parties thoughts, and also that both are thinking the same sort of things.

Wonderful poem.

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A good collaboration Brenda, I find these very interesting especially when they are clear-cut like this and the reader can see exactly who is speaking. This sounds like bad news all round with a lack of communication taking dominance...that would be the way you wanted it to sound I would say...
Nicely done,
Cheers,
Helen :-)

[Floating on the feather..]

This is beautiful.....

A quest for a destination desired by both but unfortunately attained by none.
Love is such, it keeps straying away the more you try to find it....you have to show it and love all the more to be loved.

Great collaboration. You both are fantastic.