Wanna Run Away and Hide

...racing away from responsibilities.

Wanna run away and hide
Let's race to the van and go
Eat candy for breakfast as we ride
Where we go, no one will know.

Sleep all night and all day
Just sitting on the beach
No worrying about bills to pay
  We'll be totally out of reach.

Let the water hit our feet
And get sand in our shorts
All rested and complete
Sure we'll need new passports

For this dream we're all destined
Return date undetermined!

Reviews

[forfila]

Yes, yes,,, take me with you, I am serious,,, let me know when. Just got to get one of those passports for my mum too and I'll meet you there... =)

Nice write, I love it, as long as I have my words I am home,, take me where the wind blows =)

Love
Me

[justjenn_2u]

Running away and enjoying it. Eating candy, gives me a little moment to look back on how just a piece of candy could make me happy. Getting in the car and just taking long drives, carefree. Nice trip into the imagination. How relaxing this poem is. For a moment, I was allowed to let go of all of the daily grind routines, and think about a time with no barriers.

[J. Hampton]

Oh...yes we'll definitely need passports ...to be far enough away to have a pece undefiled

My fantasy as well

::::: SIGH ::::

Blessssssssssssssssssssssssss

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Well, come on down to Florida then! What a beautiful write!

[Carole]

Sounds like a plan to me. I love this one. How many times I have uttered the words, "Stop the Merry-go-round, I want to get off!" This piece makes me long for the beach!! Great write!

[Colette]

Mmmm Hmmmm!!!!!

[Sqeaver]

Cute. I wanna run away and hide too. Great job.

[Phil Sanders]

Delightful !!!!!

[Blackbirdsong]

I like the sense of freedom and adventure in this...some of the rhymes are a bit off or clumsy...for instance "destined," and "undetermined." It might be fun for you to write something without rhymes and see how you like it.

[Lia]

Love the playfulness. It's just how I feel lol Great piece!