Madison Paige

Madison draw the picture with this poem for art class at school. She and I wrote this one evening, having fun together.

M adison is a beautiful girl
A perfect little princess is she
D ancing with a swirl
I magining where she should be
S he loves to pray
O n bent knees
N ight and day.

P robably the most energetic
A nd talkative girl
I deally loving music
G racefully dancing with a twirl
E deavoring and hectic.

Author's Note

about my 6 year old niece who lives with me

Reviews

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Very nice write and a fitting tribute!

[None]

Acrostic poetry always leaves me baffled at each attempt but yours reads so well and is very enjoyable to view. This is a beautiful tribute to your niece. It's nice to know she loves to dance and pray so much!

[Blackbirdsong]

The meter is still off and this should be either "bended" or "bent"

"O n bend knees"

But its still a charming write :)

[Sqeaver]

I like the new format must better.

[Blackbirdsong]

This is a lovely tribute to your niece and I'm sure she loved. Poetically speaking the meter is off in places, so I'd like to offer a suggestion which I've found helps me out a great deal and that is to read this out loud and find any places that make you stumble or pause. I've done that for years to polish my work, so I hope that helps you too. :)

[Isaiah Jay]

Sounds like a little sister to me.

[Sqeaver]

She sounds so cute. Great write.

[yinseriv]

Just what I needed! Sorry I won't add any 'constructive' words for you here. Except that it is a joy to read a snapshot of a childs innocence and freedom to be.