An impulse

I am I wish

a sane impulse, 

Un dodged

and unswerved                           

By you, even in

hurt or pain                       

You unknowingly take

I am I wish,

your number one

and no one less than that

I am I wish

the nameless spur                

You can not vindicate.

I wish I am

the charm, the hope

Ordained to re emerge.                                       

And never to be felt to drift,

into the mist of fate.

 

Reviews

[The Jay]

Knitted together impeccably.

[N. An]

I seem to be waiting for more intensity to touch my writing, though I am pleased to know it stirred something deep down. :) Thanks

[tshigg]

A great piece of work. Emotions felt remind of of a tryst or thoughts after a meaningful first encounter. Not knowing but wanting there to be more. I like it!

[N. An]

Thanks for the meaningful tip!.. have already saved changes..:).. take care

[Emily B]

I like the way you took chances by separating parts of words. It could use a little punctuation to affirm the pauses at the end of lines. All in all, a tight little piece of work.

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. ahhh ... brilliance in all its finery ...