BITTERSWEET CONCLUSION

 

Endless paths

Lead to similar conclusions

Often lost

Obviously programmed

Such strange embryonic wiring

Curiosity drives the lad

The elder expired long ago

I wonder if gestation

Fully developed to begin with

Moldy walls

Surround the sacred city

Heartbeat of musical thought

The sound check

Fell upon deaf ears

Frail naked emperor

Stands before his loyal subjects

Petals of the sweet narcissus

Strewn along symbolic skyways

Bittersweet conclusion

Our hero walks alone

 

 

© Bill Grimes Jr. 2006

 

Reviews

[Wildfleour]

This piece is very powerful, Bill. For me it evokes a sense of lonliness behind the power.

[Moonlit-Blues]

Beautifully controlled: Especially loved these lines:
Surround the sacred city
Heartbeat of musical thought

and

Petals of the sweet narcissus
Strewn along symbolic skyways
Bittersweet conclusion
Our hero walks alone

Melancholy, but beautiful not necessarily in the lighter way, but of a darker, of something lingering beneath, the sadness is visible through certain word choices like 'alone', 'bittersweet'. Beautifully controlled though as well as instrospectively. Thank you for the read.