Into the lions den

 

 

Into the lions den

To face the din of listlessness

The refuse of broken marrow

The sorrow of the spine

Veins of family-forgotten!

 

Even if death claims

Black hearts shall sing no more

For this sacrifice

Ends the blasphemy

Revives the generation

Lost-now found

This is absolution!

 

The resurrection of the words

Last kind syllables

As their teeth crumble

The carnage ends

Lost lambs hear the call

 

End this suffering

Pledge new suffrage

The waning moon

Shines anew

The ivory fang is claimed!

Renaissance shall shine!

As the dawn chorus rises

 

Reviews

[The Autumn Faerie]

"Black hearts shall sing no more
For this sacrifice
Ends the blasphemy"

I love the message this conveys to the reader.
It's gentle, yet strong.

[waywithwords]

I so agree with Raye. The imagery throughout was just like a burning bush my friend a powerful poem and a message well inplanted. Have a great day. HUGS xxxxAnne

[Zelligg]

You will have to explain this to me for me to "get it." Sounds like the end of somethings good?

[PhoeniX]

peaceful and taw. words can be so many things.

[Eve]

This is actually very well thought out and well written, better read out loud as to grasp the meaning
behind it and the lovely way it has been presented, a birth of a new dawn reminiscent of the glorious ages... I for one would not mind a simpler time.

[Luqman Qadi]

New birth, spiritual reconciling of the pure in heart. " Black hearts shall sing no more". Death for Life... for the pure. Maybe? A tasteful piece.

Luqman

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Akin to the family struggles both off and within the plains of Africa. I saw the old fighting for power which shimmered in my minds eye to a new scene. A young leader, bright in compassion with a fierce heart. Comes and aids the week, while to old lay dieing in their own follies.

Many canotations within your prose. Political as well as familial.

Wonderful craftsmanship!
Thank you for sending it to me! :)

There is a very strong spiritual message. The words I see in the bible and yet given a lot of strength and emphasis.

Good form and rhythm. Good read

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

I really like the idea of rebirth. You give it a very urgent approach and I think it is the one most appropriate.

"Veins of family-forgotten!" --- This line really struck me. There are many people who no longer care for their orgins and/or practices of their families/ancestors. If we don't know where we come from then we won't know who we really are. I think the break in this line is very effective.

"Even if death claims
Black hearts shall sing no more
For this sacrifice
Ends the blasphemy
Revives the generation
Lost-now found
This is absolution! " ---- I know you have been getting many reviews on this stanza alone, but that is because it is very powerful. It gives hope to the next generation and the old generation alike that the end of "black hearts" and "blasphemy" is finally coming to an end. "Revives the generation" gives hope that maybe the young will open there eyes to what they are doing in their lives. If they are destroying each other, how do they expect to survive i a world of hate? "This is absolution" is a great sentence to sum this up. It couldn't be more perfect.
thank you for sharing.

[E. M. Murren]

Such a deep and interesting work. Powerful imagery. I really like this work a lot. It leaves me with much to think about. Thank you.

[Shadows of Sight]

What a remarkable work that has taken up my senses and transported them into a world of the Pride Lions of Africa! Your words lit my senses afire with smells and visions that only your creation here could have done!
It reminded me of the pure power of Pride Rock from the Lion King!
Great Job! :)