You make my life beautiful

Two persons realise their love finally when both of their eyes reveals their secret crush for each other..☺

"Darling you are my beautiful story;
I am going to tell to everyone.
When everyone makes you an option
Our love makes it a beautiful life..!!"


Broken heart with a hoping mind,
When she swifts right into my heart♡♡
Making all the affairs to be vacant
And makes it only for the one !!


Deeper we look, more secrets revealed;
Only lips moves , words expressed through eyes..,
Unaware of the surroundings;
We look deeper, when we realise
"Yes We Do" !! ♡♡

Author's Note

Its my another attempt to get love from you people so please do review wheather good or bad ...I will try my best possibility to reach to your hearts ♡ ♡

Reviews

[Shannon]

This is a great way of expressing love realized in a very sweet way.

I have some wording ideas (I always seem to want to remove words from people's poems. Also all suggestions are only suggestions).
Deeper we look, more secrets revealed
Only lips move, words expressed through eyes

[Bidya Palai]

Thankyou!! S.Mi for your suggestion..I have changed the lines ☺☺

[Deuces]

True expression of devotion and love. Nice piece.

[Bidya Palai]

Thankyou Cyntax for your review☺☺

[M P Ramesh]

bidya,
Writers have so many methods to tell truth. When love that matters writer has to be more and more careful as great minds have trespassed the area with great lines. when we look at our dear's eyes , the world will dissolve in to nothing. One is so confident and brave altogehter. What else is needed to get lost fore ever. The way you catch up with diction and moods are exemplary
great indeed..............

give it to your DEAR

you will get returns in FULL

carry on.........


mpr

[Bidya Palai]

:-) :-) Thankyou so mch dear :-)

[Indra Dharma]

I liked it especially the last verse of the poem.

I'm no expert, but I wish you had selected a few words that rhyme so it'll somewhat sound a little more catchy, but overall it was good and original. :)

[Bidya Palai]

Thankyou Indra!!! For ur review☺☺

[samparks,sam]

great really need some more line for good star. I like it nice thought in you . I first time see in your poem. well

[Bidya Palai]

Thankyou Sampark ☺☺