Snowing Softly

Snow falls gently--gently, softly
On red upon a green-ed ground
Hiding shades of dark'ning sorrow--
Making not a single sound

The pieces scattered on the grass--
Like peddler's o'er turned cart--
All dead and broken--none still moving
They all lack a beating heart

One last fleeting glance revealing
Fractured dreams--nothing more--
'Till the solace of the everlasting
Death, knocking at the battered door

Snow drifts softly--oh, so softly
Covering footsteps tracked in lore
Snow so softly--falling down
Will Death's ease be found once more?

Author's Note

I got bored in English class when we were talking about the Civil War.

How's my first attempt at more formal poetry?

Reviews

[Castonovia]

Fragile tone almost and it reminded me of the "Raven" by Edgar Allen Poe which added more appeal, luved the reiterating because it drew more importance to the words;)

[Hope]

Absolutely beautiful! Delicate in tone and wisely constructed! Superb job!!

[Cody Wiggins]

i like it its cool to me

[Eldee]

For a first attempt at more formal poetry it is very well done. The meter is a little off in some places, but your word choice was done amazingly well. Can't wait to see how you improve from here!