Autopsy

Autopsy of a modern young idiot

Autopsy

The autopsy report of mr.Young

The one who lived in emotional coma

The body found from an island unvisited.

Brain seems so biased and slippery

For he might have thought many.

Heart stolen or missing

No medical reasons found for that.

Eyes tired of blurred visions

And forcefully closed to see dreams.

Lips that smiled to everything

Sometimes to things not even good and handy.

Stomach full of unchewed food

For he never ate it to taste.

Vein full of thick blood

Blood thick of unexpressed emotion.

Lungs full of perfume chemicals

But body totally smells dirty morality.

Dead of disappointment is the final verdict.

Postmortem was recommended by Mr. Gain

Who is not perfect without Mr.Loss.

Autopsy signed by Dr.Time.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Cattleya]

Wow I really loved this one

[Lea Paul]

Well written. Beautiful.
The poem makes perfect sense. I really appreciate the thought and effort that has gone into this poem.

[Anjali]

Good points first- very well written poem. Loved reading about the autopsy that was explaining about Mr. Young with all those details and the final verdict dead of disappointment was perfect!

Coming over to lacks- Is there anything specific you wanted to express by writing mr. Young instead of Mr. Young? Since all other (say Mr. Gain, Mr. Loss, Mr. Time) begin with M instead of m in Mr.

[bibin Sebastian]

Happy that you have noticed it. That shows the insignificance of the modern individual/individuality when compared to the significance of time ,gain and loss.

[Addict With a Pen]

I love it. From the names, to the stolen heart and the details about un-chewed food and unexpressed emotion. This is so perfect, and paints such a clear picture of who is person was. It's absolutely beautiful how it's an autopsy of a body, but as readers, we can tell it's more about who this boy was and how he felt. From the curl in his lips to the density of his blood, each part of himself representing who he was as a soul. Incredible.

[Moper]

"Dead of disappointment is the final verdict."

this rang inside me for a few moments. Nicely written.

[bibin Sebastian]

thanks a lot

[Tony Jordan]

I like the personifications at the end there bibin.
Bwell penned.
:)

[bibin Sebastian]

thanks a lot

[Tony Jordan]

Et Tu Bala - lol

[Bala Gorthi]

Thanks for reminding me, Tony

[Bala Gorthi]

A very well written piece explaining the life of most of the young today. I like the title and the way it is crafted it, brain biased, heart stolen, lungs full of perfume and chemical.... This is how things are these days.
Very well done Bibin. Thanks for sharing.
Check the typo line no 14. Vain (vein).
This is an excellent craft. Keep sharing.

[bibin Sebastian]

thanks a lot . thanks for the correction too.

[Bala Gorthi]

You are welcome.

[SUGATA M]

Straightforward and candid confession of some hard facts affecting our lives. More importantly nice to read.

[bibin Sebastian]

thanks a lot

[Surya]

The way you write and the words you prefer matched here exactly.Keep writing.

[bibin Sebastian]

thanks a lot

[Farhan Shaikh]

Very good lines and very much interesting poem..i liked this alot

[bibin Sebastian]

thanks a lot