LAST REQUEST

A friend given up.

Have you ever seen someone 

dying before you eyes?

Slowly

Her eyes are already dead

She can barely walk

Happy to die

It broke my heart

All I could do was cry

For the person I knew

Just a year ago

Was full of hope

Sparkling eyes

Warm smile

Now all gone

She's in another world

Nothing touches her

Nor can i get through

Nothing I can do

By Christmas

She will be a memory

Author's Note

I have just written this, the writing just flowed otu and this is the result: I iwll possibly review it again.

Reviews

[Traci]

You have expressed your thoughts, and obvious pain exceptionally well in this piece of art. For me, personally it was a reminder of a very painful time, when my mother died.

Passion and truth renders the factual depth of one's loss. Love never dies nor does the soul. May you take a sliver of your loved one's legacy with you, and continue to create your own. May you never forget how she lived and died, courageous, as only a Hero could.

[Stella Armour]

sometimes a spirit leaves before the body dies and it can be heartbreaking to watch what is left, i always try to remember the whole person.. a good account of death approaching and being welcomed

[Athina]

your poems are really touching. so deep. i love reading your poems. your a good writer. you wrote about a girl dying and so sad if you saw her dying. so sad to know that once a happy person is dying. that's really sad

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Truly touching and warm. But it was also sad. 100/100 Great job here. :)

[Bell-lala]

This is such a beautiful poem. I can relate to this sad feeling you so successfully was able to display in this poem. Losing some one is never easy. You did such a wonderful job in taking that hurt and sad emotion and creating a lovely piece of writing. This is just such a great write. Keep up your amazing creativity.

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

Life illustrated plainly and in all of it's truth. Yes - I have borne witness to exactly this. And when she was gone, it was almost a relief that we did not have to remember how much of her was lost, bit-by-painful-bit. Though during that time, there was time enough to say things needing saying. By the end, there was nothing left to say but goodbye. Perspective took a bit in coming. In the mean time, Life hurts. Then - Life heals. A life lived between moments is what a life is. Thank you for reminding me of this.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

so sad.........I have written of people like this. To me they are the walking dead. They may even smile but it never meets their eyes. Wonderful piece.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks for sharing your candid expressions of loss, really moving.

[zainul]

The tragic event has been depicted very vividly in this piece.
Your helplessness has been rightly reflected in the statement,"Nothing I can do".
Well done.
You may check this line,"It broke my my heart" to see if 'my' has been used twice
intentionally.

[emmajoy]

How sadly but beautifully put your feelings, Bobbie, the helplessness and more is so hard to express. All i can add is that in spite of your obvious pain, you've written a tragedy of extraordinary and subtle words, Bobbie.

[Bobbie Coelho]

Thank you so much it's so good to know that I have expressed my thoughts well.