For poetry contest - theme Family

A nightmare shook awake thousands afar
tore brutally clutching families apart
I cried I swear compassion in heart.
but earth under me feels safe and hard
at my question I feel bad
For how long can I feel sad?

 

A place I hear families go
has flower and mountain and rivers flow
A paradise on earth with lovers glow
but I am just a city girl how would i know
at my question I feel bad
why should I love it, so what if its snow-clad?

 

Mothers touch soft and healing
father’s pat sends ego reeling
brother’s words curt yet caring
such is family’s love, i have been hearing
but at my question I feel bad
how do I write about what I never had.

 

Reviews

[Richard Guimond]

you did and very well i could relate to every words so must be with a multitude
reach the mass be a long time poet goal

''brother’s words curt yet caring'' my favorite verse cause I often bled from brother's broken glass words

bravo

[Nerf]

The ending is crushing and has a lot of emotion woven in. I liked the piece a lot the concept the idea and can't help but picture Nepal through your words and how important family is during times of tragedy

[Reese's Puff]

I have my own interpretation of this and I think so does everyone else. But I think that no matter who you are or where you are and how different your interpretations may be I think we can all come together and connect to this. Thank you for sharing.

[Coyote Poetry]

We always miss what we don't have.
"Mothers touch soft and healing
father’s pat sends ego reeling
brother’s words curt yet caring
such is family’s love, i have been hearing
but at my question I feel bad
how do I write about what I never had."
I like the above lines a lot. Kindness and love of family. Our best days. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

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You are safe while others suffer and all around you there are hints of mountains of paradise blanketed in snow and loving families but you question how you could even imagine it because you have not experienced it. A sad write causing the reader to look at his own world and how he fits into it. Well-done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i feel this poem...the disaster with the mountains, the earthquakes and all those poor people lost under avalanche after avalanche...you portray not only their pain and loss, but the agony of the ones far away from it, whose hearts are caught under the debris just as much.