alone

A fiery soul like a candle , craved love,to burn.
To burn is to live,
Betraying the barriers of her own dignity,
She played out her heart to be scrutinized .
Being just a ray of light in the darkness ,
She was lit , and kept aside, as she lit and melted away,
The sun came and it was another day.
Candle which lives the days defined by the sun,
Has a place of her own, but was willingly left by,
every time the sun shone.

Today, She defines her chivalry, cruelly.
Everytime you light her for the company of your dark nights and no moon light,
She's far gone, invisible to your sight,but
You will burn another candle tonight.

Author's Note

Please review. Would love to know how you find it. Thank you :)

Reviews

[Tks]

The feeling of loneliness rings true in your words, emphasised wonderfully by the way "you light her"...to burn is to live. The ability of the candle to burn by herself, after being left for alone so many times, is both a blessing and a bane, albeit to different parties. Your writing appeals to me!

[bhavya]

Thank you so much. Means a lot.

[Hebe]

Very unique way of descibing loneliness..... i felt the emptiness and emotion...great piece.

[bhavya]

Thank you so much Hebe :)

[Rakesh Pandey]

It's very poignant! It's the kind of thing, which never let's one sleep! Awesome!

[bhavya]

Thank you so much! :)

[Terrence Chang]

Loneliness= Solitude
Solitude= Emptiness
Emptiness= Greed
Greed= Depression
Depression= Sadness
Sadness= Loneliness

You have expressed it well by using vivid words. Well penned Bhavya

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. Had to be read a few time.Your words telling story of light and the darkness. I like the tone and honest feel of the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[bhavya]

Thank you so much.:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[3X3MPLER]

its not just direct. A little complex i would say and thats why i like it.keep it up ,you have it in you

[bhavya]

You have it in you** I'm blessed to get such an.appreciation... Thank you so much

[alifeacoustic]

Nicely done. I like the concept of having a fire to burn to light your darkness, only for it to be discarded, unwanted when the sun shines. And as the candle burns it's last, its final thoughts being there will be another candle to take my place. I really enjoyed this.

[bhavya]

Thank you so much.. :)

[alifeacoustic]

You're welcome :-)