Labyrinth

Tetractys, A Tetractys is an age-old English form of writing poetry which was created by the late English poet Ray Stebbings. It is basically a five-line poem of 20 syllables with a title.

Labyrinth (Mirror Tetractys)

 

 

 

Love,

You left

Without me

To the unknown.

Leaving me behind in an obscure town!

 

Here I’m haunted by daemons of our past.

So…come back soon.

Stop me to

Become

-Me.

Author's Note

Tetractys is an age-old English form of writing poetry which was created by the late English poet Ray Stebbings. It is basically a five-line poem of 20 syllables with a title, arranged in the following order: 1,2,3,4,10.
Whereas, a Mirror Tetractys is a form with two 5-line stanzas consisting of a simple Tetractys followed by a reverse Tetractys. Thus, it should have a syllabus count of: 1-2-3-4-10 : 10-4-3-2-1 :)

Reviews

[Eudaimoniac]

I kinda see form as a restriction that one can set themselves. It means it's easier to fail, but when successful can be all the more impressive according to a specific standard (easily comparable etc.) I think you've done very well, I look forward to reading more of you, and perhaps to learn more about form through your skill.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Thank you :)

[J'Eliot]

When I read I really couldn't figure out its style. Yes, it is well written depicting the pain and urgency in the voice.

Great work though!

-Eliot

[Praveeta]

Lovely write. Enjoyable read :)

[Ahena MK]

Hey that's really really good... Keep it up ... Loved it

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Thank you :)

[emilydeibler]

I really love the form and how it complements the subject of the poem. Adhering to that structure and conveying a message succinctly and effectively takes both effort and talent, so good work!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Thank you ma'am! Appreciate your words a lot :)

[Abeer until dawn]

Yes! Exactly, my friend. it's hard to convince yourself to stop looking back and calling someone from the past ... I felt it right there! you suddenly quit fighting the urge of revisiting your old daemons, though you'v got to be careful it's very dangerous back there.

Good luck.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Hey! Thanks a lot :) I'm glad to know that you enjoyed reading it :)

[Ankit Mahar]

Short but hearttouching .I love this poem .Try some rhyme next time .maybe it will fulfill the missing ingredient

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Ah! No man. I don't like to rhyme. It sounds childish to me. Also, a Tetractys doesn't need to rhyme anyways. Thanks a lot for your suggestion though. Glad you like it! :)

[Ankit Mahar]

You are welcome brother. And forgive me cause I was not having any information about Tetrsctys .

[Sukriti Suki]

You say a lot with very little, I really appreciate this form of writing. Intrigued and curious to read more of your work.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Thank you! Appreciate your words a lot :)

[Just Kim]

Here I’m haunted by daemons of our past.
So…come back soon.
Stop me to
Become
-Me.

Awesome! This is amazing,
I love the emotion in this.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Thank you! Appreciate your words a lot :)

[Stormie Sky]

This is pretty good :) I like it :D

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Thank you! Appreciate your words a lot :)

[Stormie Sky]

your welcome :)

[SyberRose]

Nicely done...I have never written a tetracty...I will have to try one sometime.
SyberRose

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Thank you! Appreciate your words a lot :)