To Life Again?

A Chōka, with the syllabus count of 5-7 5-7 5-7 5-7-7.

With each drop of rain

That falls on my arid skin.

My body shivers,

More than ever in this cold.

I feel numb and stun,

Empty like a haunted crypt.

Without sensation,

I beg for an easy death

To rest in peace forever.

Author's Note

Chōka consists of 5-7 sound units phrases repeated at least twice, and concludes with a 5-7-7 ending. This writing has a syllabus count of 5-7 5-7 5-7 5-7-7 :)

Reviews

[Just Kim]

I feel numb and stun,
Empty like a haunted crypt.
Without sensation,
I beg for an easy death
To rest in peace forever.

Love these words, awesome read, it's very moving

[carol burgess romance]

sadness oozes from your words...well structured

[Shelina Shariff-Zia]

This is very moving and very sad. Beautifully written.

[Livin'todieCS]

Very strong and vivid. Great job!

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Very deep I would say, great job you've done there!
Keep writing!

[chea]

Good one.. but death never comes easy.. :)

[Peeyush]

beautiful!!!

[Nick Keys]

Vivid and Aware. Great Poem!

[rnuff]

Simply amazing, Glad to see you post a new one.
I enjoyed this write.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Thank you :)