To Life Again?

A Chōka, with the syllabus count of 5-7 5-7 5-7 5-7-7.

With each drop of rain

That falls on my arid skin.

My body shivers,

More than ever in this cold.

I feel numb and stun,

Empty like a haunted crypt.

Without sensation,

I beg for an easy death

To rest in peace forever.

Author's Note

Chōka consists of 5-7 sound units phrases repeated at least twice, and concludes with a 5-7-7 ending. This writing has a syllabus count of 5-7 5-7 5-7 5-7-7 :)

Reviews

[Unspoken poet]

Empty like a haunted crypt.
Without sensation,
I beg for an easy death
To rest in peace forever.

Love this part, this is so well written and presented.

[m3lody mae]

A very poetic and rhymatic piece, nicely written and emotional

[Donicca Dona L]

This is when I call when ''the soul dies'' we may be walking with our body but we are dead inside. we can not wait for the body death that it's seems coming too slowly ... very deep and beautiful written.

[Manasa.L]

Too intense I liked it. A strong words of feeling. Truly aspiring.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Death... perhaps the ultimate destination of human ...
too deep... too intense...
i like the way of representation..
This style sounds good and captivating ...
Sir, I'll definitely be glad if you check out for my writings and provide some suggestions.
I want to write novels...
I do have a co writer too.
We're on our way to that...
And we'll be lucky to have your support...
Thanks a lot...
Anindita

[Riddhi]

These are not just some lines but there is indeed a deep meaning hidden behind it. .
I especially liked the last line- I beg for an easy death to rest in peace forever...
Keep on writing...

[Pixieblue]

This is a very deep piece, like lucid dreaming i could almost picture the moment.

[Kousika]

Great piece of writing friend.. I enjoyed..