Loneliness coming for me

 

 † The Evanescent screams †

 

 

 

 

 

 † Loneliness coming for me †

 

 

As I hear his footsteps approaching towards me,

 

A shiver charged across my spine.

 

I looked at the half open door of my room,

 

And found him staring towards me.

 

 

 

He opened the door and started to walk,

 

With his face hidden by the shadow of it’s hat.

 

He sat in front of me and with fear I looked,

 

At his face smiling innocently at me.

 

 

 

I sighed since finally relief came to me,

 

I smiled back at him for I was not afraid anymore.

 

Since In the midst of that dark and never ending night,

 

I found a new friend and loneliness his name was.

 

 

Reviews

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This one is much of a description of how loneliness is coming for you, and all mirror the last stanza.
You're not afraid anymore and seem to love the company of this faithful new friend - loneliness.
Like in my poem 'Solitude', i stated 'My solitude, my only friend, my only hope of not being broken'
And I find the same themes in this poem of yours which is beautifully penned ... we find the loneliness smiling at you, and we get the picture that it is both stunning and touching at the same time.
Well penned

[hiralbpandya]

very nice...

[Ladysue]

This was a profound piece of writing. embracing loneliness is can be a good thing. I thought you wrote this brilliantly...loved it!

[Gandré]

Here I would get rid in the last line of the "and". Solitude can be seen positively, too. It's the time, when you look inward. Good job!

[LlamaLord]

This is so well thought out. There is passion in the way you talk about the stranger. You talk in a hinting way (in the first few stanzas) that the person in your room some how has an extremely personal relation with you. I assumed this was simply a reflection, but you added much deeper meaning. Excellent write! :D:D

[Elanra]

this one reminded me of my poem "my stolen words"....

i think its beautifully written and very well told again.. i dont know how you do this, it almost seems magical, the way it appears to be sooo easy to write like you do... you amaze me each time i read something u have written. its almost ridicilious how good you are at this. i look like a toddler compared to you. and yet all i can do is to read your work with awe.

great work, excellent rhymes, and a hitting end.. congratulations.

[deeps]

Oh Wow! I totally loved this one, especailly the ending,
I found a new friend and lonliness was his name.
Awesome!