My Silent Screams

 

† The Evanescent screams †

 

 

 

† My Silent Screams †

 

 

 

I silently breathe beneath the darkness of the underwater,

 

For they should not hear my abandoned cries.

 

I walk across the crowd with my head looking down,

 

For they should not see the tears building behind my eyes.

 

 

 

All the unspoken words that I wanted to shout out loud,

 

Are coming at the tip my tongue for me to speak out.

 

But then I turned mute and twisted around,

 

And in my head only I allowed myself to shout.

 

 

 

At night, in my bed I burrowed my face on my pillow,

 

And finally yelled all of my silent screams.

 

Screaming for someone to hear my cries,

 

Screaming for someone to save me before I will die.

 

 

 

Reviews

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The first stanza shows how you try to hide all the unhealed pain which are surrounding you. It also shows how you're suffocating inside, wanting to let out all your tears, blood and screams but you are unable to because you do not want to be noticed.
The second stanza somehow builds up the urge to spill it all out but like i perceived, you're left in an inept state that you cannot demonstrate what you're going through.
The last stanza has an irony in the sense that at last, you finally scream and let out everything, but you still do it silently and vigilantly. You want to be heard, and do not want to be heard at the same time....and this perfectly explains the meaning of your title - My Silent Screams
The two last lines, which I find very meaningful and poignant in a way show that among the crowd you're walking or among the people you're hiding your pain, there will be someone who will decode your lies about not being in pain...you hope that someone will see the scars you're hiding
Awesome write..

[Gandré]

Nothing moves without a prior mover. This leads us to regress from which often the only escape is belief. Something had to make the first move, and that something we then call god.

[An owl on the moon]

This is exquisitely spoken... moving like a song into the depths of the soul... the deep places where few dare to venture. So profoundly moving and written with flawless form. So very beautiful.

[MagiCrystal]

I can't leave your poetry... this is like a drug.. it just getting better and better such a high...and I want more.. lot's more .. I need more..
You are an angel..I know it

[Brokensoul]

Touched my heart really...

[Nassira Merahi]

Very deep and painful emotions. You have described it with so much intensity that it is heartbreaking Bhavya. Even though you want to be heard, your screams are burried in a pillow and inside you ... the pain you feel is so well conveyed and it hurts. Very touching my friend....
Salaam

[LlamaLord]

Oo the first stanza had me tuned into the poem so well. In the first couple of lines, the imagery is amazing. You packed loads of emotion into these lines.

"I silently breathe beneath the darkness of the underwater,
For they should not hear my abandoned cries.
I walk across the crowd with my head looking down,
For they should not see the tears building behind my eyes."
Very beautiful. The line where you tell about being in front a crowd, really tells the reader that there is a further meaning to your cries. That there is more to be considered than just crying in public. Hope I said that without too much confusion.. lol. Lovely write :D

[Elanra]

Wooow.... this one touched some deep wound... and i am kinda tearful bcus of it. The fact is, i know this feeling. I spent 9 months with that feeling completely alone. I had tried writing poems to explain that but i was never able to and now seeing that you managed to do it this majestically.. i am having goose bumps here..

apart from it being a complete honest and well told way to explain a true feeling, your spirutual signature is in it too.. once again that gloomy, bitter air of LIFE is sooo tangible in it, its almost like watching a real person's life, watching things you are not supposed to see.. things private and should belong only to him.. *reads again*

*nods head* i really dont know what else to say apart from Kavish's review... and if i continue i will babble even more, so let me just say that this is a perfect piece of art from you, one more time Bhavya..

[deeps]

Such an emotional heartfelt write here.
Such feelings pour out. Very well written!