Not as we...

 

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NOT AS WE…

 

Obfuscated but with this new spirit,

I’m starting to walk on this new path of life.

Making an imitation out of it,

For this past is asking for its price.

 

 

Since this time I as I…

Not as we…

 

 

Together yet so broken inside,

A brain consoled but a heart still so inconsolable.

Wounds so deep which are hopeless to hide,

Every thing is now turning out to be so unworkable.

 

 

But this time I as I…

Not as we…

 

 

Eyes red as blood and wet without any tear,

As I have already lost them to you my dear.

Wondering the reason for this betrayal,

But I’m moving on with this life without any fear.

 

As this time I as I…

Not as we… … …

 

 

Author's Note

Inspired by the song "Not as we" by Alanis Morissette :)

I simply love that song!

Reviews

[Imperfection]

The first time I went through this, I didn't have words to review this. I had to think long and hard before I could piece together, a review to post here.

Together yet so broken inside,
A brain consoled but a heart still so inconsolable.
Wounds so deep which are hopeless to hide,
Every thing is now turning so unworkable.

- is my favorite stanza. I don't know how you come up with these sentences that hit the heart straightaway.

Like always, the pictures are just so appropriate for your words. They truly 'set the mood' � like another reviewer before me pointed out. Another thing that I loved about the way you've presented this piece is the use of black and red colors in the font. The font by itself, seems so very nostalgic to me�don't know why. And I view, black and red here as representating gloom and pain respectively.

Now I'm afraid of asking you if you think that this is your best piece. For I'm sure, in reply to that you'll come up with something emotionally far more overwhelming than this one.

:-)

[*Rain*]

I really like it! The images you added inhance the reading, as it sets a mood. I love the "I as I, not as we". Especially how you break it up by adding it. Wonderful work!!!

[!!..Love..!!]

After reading this poem I was just sitting, wondering what should I write.
I really fall out of my words after reading it.
Alanis Morissete is a super talented woman and I have heard a lot of stuff by her and will soon listen to this song too.
But this poem bhavya, it is just so beautiful.
I would die to have this much of talent to write so flawlessly?
I sometimes wonder how can someone write so effortlessly!