Where did I go wrong?

A song lyric :)

 

 

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WHERE DID I GO WRONG?

 

 

 

Whenever I asked you this question you remained quiet,

But now I have realized,

“Where did I go wrong?”

And “where were you right?”

 

{Verbal acoustics}

 

I just got into my bed alone tonight,

With the bed still made up on your side.

And I count days like years and months like centuries,

With dry tears flowing from my eyes like dead autumn leaves.

 

Since now I have realized,

“Where did I go wrong?”

 

Ah huh, ah huh huh…

{Verbal acoustics}

 

It felt so great when you were by my side,

And how we used to held each other so tight.

Gone are those days and I’m left with pain,

Since I have realized that you won’t be back again.

 

Because it was just me who went wrong,

It was just me who went wrong.

 

Ah huh, ah huh huh…

{Verbal acoustics}

 

 

I was just so wrong when I let you go,

And let you walk away from my life.

Forever and ever and ever……

 

 

(Piano solo)

 

 

Since now I have realized,

“Where did I go wrong?”

And “where were you right?”

 

I was just so wrong when I let you go,

And let you walk away from my life.

Forever and ever and ever……

 

(Fades out…)

 

 

 

Reviews

[Imperfection]

Have you tried your hand at lyrics before? I'm unable to recall if I've read lyrics from you before this.
This is a good one�
You've captured a range of emotions here. Overwhelming feelings�.the longingness, pining, regret and love.

The line that touched me most is - I was just so wrong when I let you go�
It surely has a reverberating effect.

Well, the remaining part of the piece is just as effective. The visuals your words create are fantastic too.
Consider this as an example:
I just got into my bed alone tonight,
With the bed still made up on your side.
And I count days like years and months like centuries,
With dry tears flowing from my eyes like dead autumn leaves.

And yet the piece doesn't seem quite whole to me�since I don't yet know how the song will sound like.

The pictures again are appropriate. I loved the first one�the person singing the song, maybe?
Yes. I believe so.

Good attempt.

P. S. I think you meant quiet in the first line (as opposed to quite).

[Ruby Moon]

give me the song!
lol... it has a really nice flow and rhytm to it
i can almost hear it but then i wont know if that is how you meant it to sound

>.<
stupid school com...cant see the pictures
but then again without seeing them, from past experiences i am sure you got the right pictures to go with it

[Blue Rose]

I LOVED it, from the pictures to the way you have written it.
I felt the presence of a very strong piano vocal in this song, and I'm sure you will rock with this one too dear.

[Blackbeats]

Beautiful, really beautiful!
I'm sure it will make a great song.

[Kevin Andros]

The Shape is good, Bhavi.

Peice shows your confusion and determination to know where did you go wrong.

Nice work.

WIll say more in a private message.

~KA~

[Roxy]

Oh dear! This is so sad but beautiful, you are a master of writing things like this.
Pefect Bhavya copywritten stuff!

[Golden]

This is simply great! What a beautiful and SAD song :(

[LlamaLord]

:) sounds like a slow song. Really enjoyed this :) love your stuff!

[Nassira Merahi]

Your sensitivity is "a fleur de peau" as always.... a lot of emotions and regret! This sad but so well written. I love your work Bhavya. The pictures that go with it are very well chosen also.... but you have a unique artistic gift and it makes your work worth spending some time reading and appreciating. Thank you so very much for sharing such an art :))))
Salam :)

[!!..Love..!!]

I'm sure of the fact that this would make a great song. Here I don't know why but I got an attitude in your tone as you yourself gave the reason for your question - "Where did I go wrong"
I will surely catch you in a day or so to listen this one too ^-^