My immortal

 

 

 

 

 

 

..

 

 

 

MY IMMORTAL….

 

 

Your long lost words silently whispers to me,

A Stolen memory gradually thrills my drenched skin.

You were only my past and that I can clearly see.

But I'm living with a hope, a ray of light which is so dim.

 

When all the time I was hollow inside,

When all the time I thought I was incomplete.

Whenever from this world these tears I hide.

You were always there to make me complete.

 

But where are you ?

Where are you my immortal ?

 

I can't find what keeps me here,

My heart is still unwilling to believe that you're gone.

A year before only we were so close, so near,

So how can I live my life like this being so alone?

 

People say that time erase everything,

It heals every wound and qualifies every ache.

But I'm having such a pain here deep within,

Which time can't cure but can only exacerbate.

 

So where are you ?

Where are you my eternal ?

 

Without you I'm surrounded by sadness from everywhere,

I'm sad not only for this world but sad from here inside.

So desperately I'm searching but I can't find you anywhere,

Since no one can fill the vacuum which you have created in my life.

 

Long lost words slowly whispers to me,

Still can't find what keeps me here.

When all this time I have been so hollow inside,

I know…I just know…you're still there…

 

My immortal…

You're here……

 

 

 

Reviews

[Dani California]

Ah, time does not erase my friend. Time heals, or if not healing, it mercifully allows for less painful breaths. Losing someone is the most difficult thing we endure, and the pain is sometimes unbearable. Though, take rest in the fact that they are right here, on the other side of the invisible wall which separates this world from the next, with their hand on our hearts as we continue on until the time comes to pass through that wall and join them.

This is just beautiful Bhavya --- as is always the case. Your passion and emotions seep from your soul into your ink.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

I love this poem it is great

[Imperfection]

I haven't been through my RR's in a while. That is the reason it took me so long to come to your poem.

The title reminds me of the Immortal Beloved letters of Beethoven.
So the mood was set right from the beginning itself.

This one is tragic, again.
Obviously I love it.

It is interesting how throughout the poem, you create loneliness and despair in the reader's mind, asking again and again where your immortal lover is. And then you end with
I know�I just know�you're still there�

My immortal�
You're here��

Each line is very powerful in itself. The underlying emotions are very strong. Anyone who has experienced loss will be able to relate to this piece.
Meaningful pictures, as usual.
Overall, very Bhavya-esque.
Very much so.

"Still can't find what keeps me here." � is my favorite line here.

Good one, again.

[Nassira Merahi]

Beautiful Bhavya! Just beautiful! The pain is felt to the bones and I guess that it was your intention to make the reader feel it that way! You have touched my soul very deeply with this one for sure .... the words you use and the way you use them to convey your sensitive situation are just flowing and enveloped my mind and soul as I was reading your sadness and emotional feelings .... you express yourself in such a touching way ....
Keep it up Bhavya! Let your heart express itself and heal!
Salam to you my friend :)

[emmajoy]

Your other readers have already said what was/is in my mind., so can't find different words for my review.. Sadness, loneliness and emptiness have held your pen and created a beautiful poem, and, the photograph is perfect.

Thank you for sharing such strong feelings.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow, this is such a sad and painful piece. Very beautifully written and the pictures fit so perfectly. This is an amazing poem.

Heather

[Kevin Andros]

I can't review this. Simply because, there are not enough words to express the feelings and the brilliance of this composition in any language ever invented in mankind. And Sadly, I don't know Martian. So, I'd leave it at that. Happy pujas Btw. ~KA~

[Buffalo Roam]

A stunning but lonely write. What a incredible display of emotions.

[TamiViolet]

You express your undying love so honestly Bhavya. Each and every line is full of emotion, and eternal love is something anyone
in love wants to hear. I know it's difficult loving someone that much, especially when we are unable to see them, touch them,
feel their presence next to us.

Timeless love is irreplacable, exquisite read...just stunning and full of tears.

Blessings,
Apollonia

[Emily B]

They say that time assuages
time never did assuage
An actual suffering strengthens
as sinews do with age.
--E. Dickinson

You've described such a timeless, ethereal longing! I found myself much moved.

[Innocent]

Dude, this is very much sad and I really prayer to god that someday, somehow,somewhere you will find her again because I cant see my friend sad like this. And yes you are right , there are few things in this world which even time can not erase.