You won't be back...

 

 

 

 

 

 

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You won't be back…

 

 

 

Dropping of a tear break this long stillness,

As recollections of our past surrounds me.

I was a pilgrim and you were my sacred place,

But now I know together we can't exist.

 

I can't forget the day when you left this world,

And I realized that how wicked god could be.

I don’t miss you the way like others do,

You are still alive here inside of me.

 

My life changed from the day you passed away,

And with every second I wished for you to come back.

You are in my prayers and in words that I say,

I just hope for someday to once see you again.

 

And since I didn’t even said to you a goodbye,

So with this poem my love, I promise.

I won’t forget you till the day I die,

As only with you I’ll be there in my afterlife.

 

Reviews

[!!..Love..!!]

You know what Bhavya, I know a guy here on writerscafe and he also writes eye-watering poems, he is my best friend and because of that I always want him to be happy. His girlfriend actually died because of leukemia last years and he is still fighting with her memories and you know what I think...He can't come out of it!
Don't say that god is wicked, he actually loved her more than anyone on this world could love her, she was her special child and that is why he wanted that angel to be with her.
I heard something moths before that when someone leave this world, he/she becomes your guardian angel and always keep their eye on you. You know what, she also must be now watching you. She also must be laughing with your smiles, must be happy to see whenever you do something good, but..she also must be crying with you and for you, whenever every tear rolls out of your eyes she must also have cried a lot at that times. So don't let her cry my dear friend.
Accept this world, you know what this world is very wicked and cruel and it would be very hard for you to relive it.
But you know what, You have yourself given the answer in the end. So what if you can't be together with her in this life. But you will be with her after your life till eternity.
You know what Bhavya, the friend about whom I was talking above was no one but you...

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Oh my goodness, this is such a sad poem and I am so sorry for your loss. This piece is powerful because of how beautifully it's written. You did a wonderful job writing this. :)

Heather

[Rain]

You have such a softness to your writing. This piece is so personal. Grief is a solitary burden. It is strange that death can bring out such beautiful writing. Your love and hurt is in every word of this piece. Time...Time...Time. Rain..

[TamiViolet]

I'm sorry you lost your love Bhavya. My second husband died in 2001, and our relationship can never be replaced. When you meet that special person, that soulmate, and watch as they suffer, their pain lives inside. You have emphasized the notion of eternal love in this beautiful piece.

I was a pilgrim and you were my sacred place. Such a tender line!

Not being able to say good - bye makes matters even more difficult as you speak of a relationship without proper closure, yet you let her know she is in your thoughts and prayers. I hope that you see her again someday, when time says it's time.

And I realized how wicked God could be.

I'm wondering if you mean death as being the wicked one in your sad love story? As far as God's role, who knows the answer there? Perhaps in the afterlife, you will be reunited with your one true love. I'm sure most of us pray very hard for that eternal meeting.

The format and photos chosen are always exceptional, enhancing grief and despair already captured in your creative verse.

Hugely enjoyable read, my friend.

[Dani California]

Bhavya... I lost my sister in a car accident many years ago. My grief is as fresh today as it was then and when I read this poem, it took me back in time to that very moment. I couldn't review it at first, and had to come back. I've told you before, you have an incredible ability to pull emotions from your readers. This is no exception. I think this one grabbed me the most.

God isn't wicked my friend. Please don't blame the only source of love we have for our pain, for that would be misplaced. He is who holds our loved ones who have passed.

As always, outstanding work :) The layout is always wonderful as well.

Much love and peace to you.

[Clyde du Coeur]

This was beautiful, really breathtaking. All the words one wishes to speak when they are without words. I liked the way you kept to the rhyme scheme and I could envision speaking the words of the speaker and all the emotions they must be feeling...
I know it must be really hard for you right now, and clearly the person you wrote this about must have been going through a lot too. Equally I wish the best for you; things will get better in time chuck, I know you won't believe it... I know I didn't at the time, but I'm really proud of how far I've gotten since.
Anyhoo, brilliant work and try to keep smiling.

[Blue Rose]

Recently my grandfather expired and I can understand how you must be feeling now. Death is an inevitable thing and none of us can defeat it. So accept it and move on.
This is really a nice tribute for her, I'm sure she must be with you and will be with you forever.

[Together]

Aww dude...You made me cry again...

[Roxy]

Very rarely do I cry after reading something, But this time I did.
I'm sorry Bhavya...

[Titus McGuire]

Beautifully written, the emotion and sorrow is evident in this piece. I have had loved ones pass on in my life, people who were very close to me, and I can understand that when you lose someone who was dear to you how difficult it can be to move forward with your own life. You never forget them, you never let go of them, but always hold them close to your heart keeping their memories alive in your mind. The third verse encapsules a lot of the emotions we feel after someone we love passes on.

'My life changed from the day you passed away,
And with every second I wish for you to come back.
You are in my prayers and in words that I say,
I just hope someday I will see you again.'

It seems not a moment passes that we don't wish we could see them again, that the whole ordeal of death was naught but a bad dream and that someday out of the blue we would see them again; that they would be waiting somewhere. As truth takes hold, however, we realize that a reunion can only be acheived in the life hereafter.

Very well written. Bravissimi.

[Blackbeats]

This is life dude and I wish this wound will heal will time.By that time write and let it go!