You won't be back...

 

 

 

 

 

 

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You won't be back…

 

 

 

Dropping of a tear break this long stillness,

As recollections of our past surrounds me.

I was a pilgrim and you were my sacred place,

But now I know together we can't exist.

 

I can't forget the day when you left this world,

And I realized that how wicked god could be.

I don’t miss you the way like others do,

You are still alive here inside of me.

 

My life changed from the day you passed away,

And with every second I wished for you to come back.

You are in my prayers and in words that I say,

I just hope for someday to once see you again.

 

And since I didn’t even said to you a goodbye,

So with this poem my love, I promise.

I won’t forget you till the day I die,

As only with you I’ll be there in my afterlife.

 

Reviews

[!!..Love..!!]

You know what Bhavya, I know a guy here on writerscafe and he also writes eye-watering poems, he is my best friend and because of that I always want him to be happy. His girlfriend actually died because of leukemia last years and he is still fighting with her memories and you know what I think...He can't come out of it!
Don't say that god is wicked, he actually loved her more than anyone on this world could love her, she was her special child and that is why he wanted that angel to be with her.
I heard something moths before that when someone leave this world, he/she becomes your guardian angel and always keep their eye on you. You know what, she also must be now watching you. She also must be laughing with your smiles, must be happy to see whenever you do something good, but..she also must be crying with you and for you, whenever every tear rolls out of your eyes she must also have cried a lot at that times. So don't let her cry my dear friend.
Accept this world, you know what this world is very wicked and cruel and it would be very hard for you to relive it.
But you know what, You have yourself given the answer in the end. So what if you can't be together with her in this life. But you will be with her after your life till eternity.
You know what Bhavya, the friend about whom I was talking above was no one but you...

[..]

such a tragic write, but yet in a way so wonderful.

[a_mystery]

I have read this poem, when I myself am searching for ease..
I totally agree with "!!..Love..!!".. She would be happy to see you happy.. with my own experience, i know, that someone is happy when I am..
And please, for the sake of yourself, don't call God wicked.. He has plans for everyone.. And as we hear the phrase: "everything happens for a reason".. why don't you search for the reasons? Please complete her incomplete works.. you would find satisfaction.. and so will she..
I salute to your love.. nd to your poetry ofcourse.. :)

[An owl on the moon]

So beautifully tragic, you fill the page with the pathos of a life gone too soon.. letting go but unable to release heart and mind. Eternal love here is so deeply expressed.

[MagiCrystal]

I came back again...I felt like I need it to read this amazing love you lost.
Just to hang out and read how can someone like you, still be able to write
such a bleeding words. Full of your life, love and soul. I am in such a piece
here, I know these words are like my soul. I couldn't done this .. no way!
Not the way you pored part of you in this poem. Love it.
I came back.. again ! To get my fix !!!


I can't forget the day when you left this world,

And I realized that how wicked god could be.

I don’t miss you the way like others do,

You are still alive here inside of me.



My life changed from the day you passed away,

And with every second I wished for you to come back.

You are in my prayers and in words that I say,

I just hope for someday to once see you again.



And since I didn’t even said to you a goodbye,

So with this poem my love, I promise.

I won’t forget you till the day I die,

As only with you I’ll be there in my afterlife.

[JENY]

Nice...really nice...
Cant...suppress the wish to know.....
who was she......

[Honeypot]

This is really sad. I hope it's just a poem and there
is no truth to it. The line about you being a pilgrim
and she being your temple is inspired. You did good
work on this one.

[Ebs]

Such a heart breaking poem! The first line:
Dropping of a tear break this long stillness,
Was absolutely beautiful. You have a great talent.

Ebs

[Jinx's Heart]

OMG! I am nearly in tears. The picture you put on here also gave me such an emotional response. Wow! That is a wonderfully written (and colored) poem. Amazing! It flowed so well as it captured every emotion having to do with losing a loved one. Amazing!

[Vaishali..^_^]

ah..!this so very nice...!
i love the way you described she won't be back and how much you are missing her...!
^_^