Still with me...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Still with me…

 

 

With ticking of every second by this clock,

You visit my lonely mind.

But then all of a sudden reality strikes me,

As I’m living with the world you’ve left behind.

 

You are still with me….

 

I still feel your presence in this room,

My heart still feels for your soul.

Your belongings still smell of you,

And near my heart I will keep them all.

 

You are still with me…

 

With every tear which rolls out of my eyes,

With my hope which I know will never break.

And I miss you every time I watch a sunset lonely,

As loving you was my choice and not a mistake.

 

 

I have tried very hard to tell myself that you’re gone…

But though! You are still with me…

…You are still with me…

 

 

Author's Note

written in just about 10 minutes :)

Reviews

[Dani California]

This is so sad Bhavya! I can't wait for the day that you
are writing about new love... it will make my heart sing
for you !! :)

But, even in all of its sadness, it's such a beautiful poem.
You really know how to play with your reader's emotions my friend.
Ten minutes indeed! That just shows how extremely talented you are.
And I love the layout -- always so creative :)

Great work as always my friend!

[TamiViolet]

I hope you find someone else sweetheart, really. Your readers feel for you so deeply as you witness from the reviews of this bittersweet verse.

As I'm living with the world you've left behind...

She has moved on with her life, and one day you will, too. I sense such loneliness here Bhavya, such a feeling of abandonment, and that is such a sad place to be. Keep writing about her for as long as you need to because we are right here with you.

My senses are always heightened after reading your work dear.

[!!..Love..!!]

Bhavya, I can relate myself so well with it! It happens with everyone of us. Whenever we love someone, we not only give them a piece of our heart but also our life and soul and incase if things doesn't turns well, a part of them always remains with us and the same is with them.

I have tried very hard to tell myself that you're gone�
But though! You are still with me�

So sad, but so strong and emotionally such a powerful line, I always love to read your work.It is just so different and amazing.

[Innocent]

Beautiful, it is so sad and beautiful, Just the way I always love to read. Dark and beautifully sad!

[Blue Rose]

Bhavya, This is so terrific! It reminded me of one of your poem "But you still have whole of me" You know how to play with your reader's emotions, isn't it?

[Blackbeats]

The layout, pictures everything is just so perfect! lovely!

[Roxy]

I agree with Amanda, poems like this show how talented a person is as this came only in ten minutes. I can't write a good poem in this much time (shame on me)

[Golden]

Dude! This is amazing. 10 minute treasure!

[Emily B]

Beautifully written . . . lovely, sad, graceful words.

[poetforlife]

I love this.I have someone who is Still With Me every day. I understand it well. Thank you for sharing such deep and intimate feelings.