Falling leaf

Falling leaf

A Poem by Bhavya Kaushik
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Falling leaf

 

 

With autumn colours

I’m falling from this dead tree

To live once again

 

 

 

 

© 2009 Bhavya Kaushik


Author's Note

Bhavya Kaushik
Syllabus count: 5-7-5



I welcome all sorts of suggestions on it� As such I guess the ending is nice! But starting line isn�t going well with it�
What�s your take? :D



(Special thanks to Caffeine for her help :) )

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Dear Bhavya, This is a great haiku. I have read many haikus till date and this is one of the bests in them. I loved the last line the most which symbolizes that there is always a new beginning after an end, which is really very inspiring. Literally also it is just perfect with the syllabus count and presentation is outstanding like always. Great job Bhavya and I'm looking forward for you to write more beautiful haikus like this

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Beautifully written! Thank you for sharing. Debileah

Posted 16 Years Ago


Beautiful job! This might be your first haiku, but it creates vivid, Autumn imagery that captivates the reader. I think your choice of font and font colors also contributes to the breathtaking descriptions. Great write! :D

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice haiku. I like it. Keep up the good work! :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is lovely. I'm no hand with fixed forms but I had a thought:

With autumn colours [maybe a word that is more colorful to describe the leaves, maybe brilliant?]

I'm falling from this dead tree

To live once again

Again, Lovely!



Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Excellent...what a great picture too.

Thanks for the send...;)

Nice work...!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Again, darkness leads to light. It seems as though we are thinking along the same line these days, honey. I love this! Your English spelling of 'colours' adds a classy touch. Message is so profound... Exceptional in thought and layout!

XXX

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I'm really very sorry Bhavya but I don't know what a haiku is , so I can't give you any suggestions for it.
But as a poem too this is very deep and conveying such a lovely meaning.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I have written quite few haikus and frankly speaking this may be your fist haiku but still it is better than all the haikus I have written, The syllabus count is just perfect and the reference of autumn is imparting the feel of haiku in it.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I don't have too much knowledge about haiku, but I know about the syllabus count 5-7-5 and I agree with other reviews that it is one of the best 5-7-5 I have ever read.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sorry dude, I don't know about it. But Iam sure of one thing that there is a lot of depth in your words, very well penned.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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