Falling leaf

haiku

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Falling leaf

 

 

With autumn colours

I’m falling from this dead tree

To live once again

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Syllabus count: 5-7-5

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I welcome all sorts of suggestions on it� As such I guess the ending is nice! But starting line isn�t going well with it�
What�s your take? :D



(Special thanks to Caffeine for her help :) )

Reviews

[!!..Love..!!]

Dear Bhavya, This is a great haiku. I have read many haikus till date and this is one of the bests in them. I loved the last line the most which symbolizes that there is always a new beginning after an end, which is really very inspiring. Literally also it is just perfect with the syllabus count and presentation is outstanding like always. Great job Bhavya and I'm looking forward for you to write more beautiful haikus like this

[Desert Dreamer]

Love the way you have combined human life with nature, including fall color and philosophy. (This is truly a haiku and not just a poem with the correct syllable count. Amazing haiku!!!) Your poem could symbolize death and rebirth, or life changes such as ending an old way of life and starting a new life.

[Vaishali..^_^]

it's just perfect...short and sweet.....!!
^_^

[Karl]

Oh wow! What a great structural poem

[Frank Terino]

this captures the death and rebirth of seasons, and is beautifully invented, is the essence of haiku!

[poetic soul]

its just lovely..!! :)

Regards,
Krishna

[HoorayForUnderdog]

Caffeine, my best friend,
super-charging my senses,
without you, I'm lost!


I liked your Haiku, Bhavya!
You Rock!
jenny

[poddar kushal]

It is perfect. How much as a poet you have grown!

[Dalaina Renee]

To the point! I liked the picture and the point to it! Well done!

[Ravenskald]

Haikus are not something I write a lot of, only comment is I'm unsure about the last line, it doesn't conclude the poem for me ( a dead leaf lives again ?) but that's just my take on it

[Laura E. Aranda]

I love LOVE love LOve haikus!