LOST

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LOST

 

Without any destination,

Without any end,

I’m walking through this life.

 

With broken dreams,

With a bleeding heart,

With frozen tears…

 

I have been lost away!

 

Darkness consumes me,

And with every second,

I’m dying all over again… and again!

 

Without any thought,

Without a word,

Without my soul…

 

I have been lost away!

 

Betrayed by destiny,

Forgotten by the entire world,

I’m alone...all along!

 

Without any sound,

Without any aim,

And without you…

 

I have been lost away!

 

Lost not only from this world,

Not only from outside,

But…Lost within!

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Amanda]

what a heartfelt write...to be lost and without a meaningful place or aim, is a sad thing indeed. to lose oneself and the one you love.... leaving an empty place, not just in the heart but in the soul as well.

this write pulled at my heart and soul. i could feel the sadness, the emptiness, the aimless movements of a life truly lost.

well written as always, Bhavya....you captured it well.

Always,

Amanda

[Vaishali..^_^]

this is so very beautiful....!

and also i love the line
"Lost not only from this world,
Not only from outside,
But�Lost within!"

awesome...!^_^

[barricade]

a great write bhavya...to say its just a small four letter word...bt the emotions and the sadness it holds within are deep..."lost not only from this world, not only from outside...but lost within!" these lines just seemed to have struck a chord...can relate to them perfectly....life goes on as it never ends...all cold and numb...jus walking thru it endlessly...no direction...no companion...no thoughts...living a lifeless life...

came across your work for the first time...and loved every bit of it...
great work...

regards
barricade...

[Karl]

Lost not only from this world,

Not only from outside,

But�Lost within!

Oh wow! This so so outstanding!

[Livin Lyfee Peacefully]

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ii 3SP3CiiALLY LUV THiiZZ PART Without any sound,

Without any aim,

And without you�

[Angel Baby]

A sad and heartfelt write that pulls the reader in from start to finish...I like that. Found it a pleasure to read, thanks for letting me know about it. Worth the read. PW

[Rain]

This piece has such utter emptiness. It is so heartfelt, I found it painful to read. For a writer, that is a good thing. It means your words created true feeling. Your words match the painted picture of lostness, with the man, alone and without a destination. Great work, although very sad. Rain..

[Kevin Andros]

Good write. You have been the master of this kind of writing ever since doomsday. Keep writing. ~KA~

[Riverdance]

Beautifully written. Lost within and out. Great descriptions!

~Rd

[Emily B]

Beautiful lost words illustrated by a beautiful lost image.

[Adela Muresan]

Wow. There's such a strong feeling that you express�I've written a poem about the emotion of being lost, but it sure doesn't reach the soul the way yours does�:P.
Great great write.

A.M.