Lonely without you...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Lonely without you…

 

 

 

 

Watching this tear as it falls into lonely space,

And I wonder as it drops into life's nameless place.

 

Depression sets in and walks right in front of my sight,

As here I'm so lonely in darkness of this cold night.

 

With this much loneliness I'll never be the same again,

I may never say a word but you are not the one to blame.

 

It's a year and a half now but you are still on my every thought,

Every tear I held in falls, and now I can't seem to stop.

 

I feel so alone now that I even don't know what to do,

As I only wish... you would have taken me away with you...

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this poem for a friend of mine who is no more now..She left this world about a year and a half back...as she was suffering from Leukemia !
I often miss her ....
:(


" I have tried so hard to tell myself that you are gone..But though! you are still with me...and I have been alone..all along..."

Reviews

[Imperfection]

Beautiful.
There is so much pain inside that is invisible to the world. Sometimes the tears fall to express the grief inside but can they ever wash away all the pain...?

My answer is no.

In fact, I see the intensity increasing with every new composition of yours.
The most beautiful poetry is that which flows out of a broken heart. Your work is proof of that.

Thank you for entering it into the Lonely Contest.

[Kevin Andros]

Well, I think I know who that special friend was.... And she'll be touched by this poem of yours.......wherever is she now..... awsome write...~KA~

[Innocent]

Awww Dude! This is sad..But I guess that's the way you wanted it to be like!
I agree with Carole, that when we are lonely we often think to why should we stay here? But that' not the right question. We are here to cherish their memories and that's the thing which matter most.
The writing is exceptionally well written!

[Carole]

It must have been very hard to lose your friend. I'm sorry, Bhavya. This is touching and speaks of loneliness and everything that so often goes with it: Tears, depression, and sometimes even longing to be with the one we are lonely for. This is very well written, and as always, your pictures are perfect for this piece. I love how you used the variation with the red in the title. Adds a special touch. You are a very talented writer, and I always enjoying reading what you send.

Blessings, Carole

[Blue Rose]

I wonder from where does you get this much power and emotions in your words, Beautiful it is and so heartbreaking!
You are really a master of writing poems like this. I agree with Caffeine,This pain will never ever going to heal. I'm sorry for that!

[Blackbeats]

This is what life is all about, it must be very hard for you dude.Exceptionally brilliant work!

[Angelic Darkness]

This is sad, yet a peace that wants and needs to be let go.
You conjure up so much emotion, and your words can relate to
all readers. Thank you for sharing......AD

[TamiViolet]

But why are we here? Really. Why? My mom was recently diagnosed with lymphoma... Dear friend, be well...and don't wish to be 'taken'... None of us knows what lies beyond....

I'm at a loss , Bhavya...

[The Grammar Nazi]

I'm with you in feeling this...For a few different reasons, but yep. Very good write, but then again, you have a lot of great ones. Keep up the good work.

[!!..Love..!!]

Omigod! This is so sad Bhavya, I feel for your pain as such something like this even happened with me too, So I could sense your pain. It must be very hard for you to deal with this much pain and loneliness. Whenever someone leaves, it creates a vacuum in our life which is impossible to be filled again.
Very passionate work Bhavya!

[Roxy]

I'm sure Bhavya no matter your friend is gone now but she will always remain alive in your heart and would be so happy to read this poem, What a great tribute to a lovely friend!