What hurts the most...

inspired by the song "What hurts the most"

 

 

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WHAT HURTS THE MOST……?

 

 

 

Waking up and getting ready for the day,

Living everyday but being trapped in this old hutch.

Yes, I can…I can live my life all this way,

As… that does not bother me much…

 

I'm not a felon or committed any serious crime,

Then why am I paying such a great cost.

Of only loving you even more than my life,

But that is not what hurts the most….

                                     

To walk alone without any destination in this rains,

To lonely cry these tears and letting them to meet the sea.

To have an empty heart but with so much pain,

But now none of them hurts me…

 

Whenever I meet our old friends, I force a smile,

As I have no answer for their questions about us.

Whenever I see your photograph, a tear rolls out of my eyes,

But that does not bother me so much…

 

Often when I close my eyes, I hear your voice,

Saying that "I'm still here by your side…"

I have no other choice than to live with this void,

But now I'm fine as for that I have already cried.

 

 

 

Whenever they ask me – Then… " What hurts the most…? "

All I could say is …. ….

 

 

What hurts the most was being so close

Having so much to say but watching you walking away

And pretending all the way that everything is just ok

To wait for you every night and every other day

 

Hallucinating myself that one day you would be back again

Unselfishly still loving you and every pain which you gave

Recollecting the words which I kept in my heart but never said

Those words which I left unspoken for always

Still I'm living but with every second I have this regret.

 

That the last words which you said was – "I love you, but…"

How you made me feel like... "What more could I do?"

Else I have no other complain from you…

 

Masochistically I'm getting it very well with this ache,

Out of which I know I can't come back.

Superfluity of this pain now began to take its toll,

The thing which hurts the most… was being so close…

 

 

 

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What hurts the most…was being so close…. ….

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Totally inspired by the song "What hurts the most" :)
And the lines - "What hurts the most was being so close
Having so much to say but watching you walking away" has been taken from the song itself...
So..that's it..
:) :)

It is also like... an half acrostic work ..I mean the one of "What hurts the most " :D

Reviews

[Imperfection]

Out of which I know I can't come back.

I think so too. Your feelings are too intense and your attachment is too much. Perhaps it is your sensitivity that draws such great poems out of you.
If one has loved truly, it is not possible to forget or replace that love with another, no matter how 'worldly perfect' the latter happens to be.

As you get better with every work, I find that I'm running short of words to review you!!

[barricade]

beautiful....that's all i can say..........

[laceyjane23]

Very Nice! I have a special place in my heart for that song, and you did a great job with this piece! Good luck in my contest!
Laceyjane

[We are young.]

I love this song, its so sad, great job on this piece.

[Kimberly_ eternal dream..]

man i looooove that sng! again v hav somthin in common!
this poem is sooo emotional! sooo deeply xpres'd dear!
"Unselfishly still loving you and every pain which you gave"
this line melted me !!! sooo awesom line da!
sooo vry nice poem da!!


-Eternal Kim...

[Michael Kerr]

i am feeling this right now. it was like reading a book of myself. i bare this burdon, i bare this pain, and there is no escape for me my friend. great poem, write on.

-mike kerr-

[Karl]

Oh wow! This is great!!!
I also love that song.

[Bamber AKA. AM-HAM]

I LOVE that song!!! And your poem was very good:). You must of loved her very much...Every poem about her is so strong with emotion.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

this has a very lovely format and images.. the pain is clear, good job with this i truly enjoyed the poem.. sad though it is .. well done.

Chloe
xoxo

[Riverdance]

I like how you tied the acrostic into the song and into the poem itself. Nicely expressed!

Thanks for entering in the Move Me contest!

~Rd

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

I like how you end the work in an acrostic. The finality of the ending is quite powerful as well. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Light,
Siddartha