Tragedy of Rain...

This one just came on my mind today only...It's raining here these days 24*7 :D

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

TRAGEDY OF RAIN…

 

 

 

 

When Sky thought of relieving Earth from pain,

He started crying and poured some rain.

From the distant horizon a sound of thunder came,

And it started raining all over again.

 

 

Earth was facing alone the fury of storm,

Suddenly raindrops came to pay their toll.

From the eyes of sky tears started to fall,

And he found them very hard to hold.

 

 

But if you could, then listen to the tragedy of rain,

Listen to the sound when rain hits this burning land.

Experience the spark which it produces in vain,

When Sun left the sky and let only clouds to expand.

 

 

Oh Rain! You always wanted to live with the sky,

In a palace of clouds where there wasn't any reason to sigh.

Where no one was allowed to even pass you by,

But now it's time for you to say your last goodbye.

 

 

The worst thing is that no one cared about your sacrifice,

As in return by us you got no smile, no reward or prize.

So…This was all about rain and her tragic tale,

Where she left the almighty sky and got only this burning land…

 

 

Reviews

[!!..Love..!!]

This is really sad and very philosophical too. Next time whenever it will rain here, I'm sure this poem of yours would come on my mind.Such a great metaphor.
Love is not at all about loving a person but it's also about getting loved by someone.
May be because the dedication and warmth in Earth's love was more than that of Sky, that's why it rained..Sky cried and finally Earth got his ultimate love.
The style and the format is awesome and as usual the usage of pictures is very apt. Amazing work Bhavya.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Wow. Amazing work. I realyly loved this poem.

[Elanra]

This is simply beautiful Bhavya. I really love using the elements of nature when I write and every piece of art which has them in it, poem, story, novel, picture, a painting it touches somewhere very deep in my heart. The natural flow that claims each of your works (as far as I read surely) is very strong in this poem too.
The best way to explain this to you would be... you just make it look so easy. It doesnt feel like it was hard writing this or it took too much effort.
It feels natural like talking would be. Like smiling to something nice would feel.
The ending fits perfectly by meaning. I am not as sure about the last line itself cus I really like it when the last two lines rhyme with each other but thats just me.
The way you use pictures and colors amazes me still.
Very nice job. *smiles*

[Karl]

Wow! I never thought of it!
Great!

[LlamaLord]

Very, Very interesting. They way you write and think about simple things like this, and turn them into the most complex pieces of work, leave me in awe. I have also noticed that the pictures you often post, are beautiful, wile at the same time, reflect your work. So beautiful.

[emmajoy]

As a lover of rain, at least for self, if not for the desert.. I found this hard to read first time around but then, then I realised what you were saying with your beautiful words and I sat back and thought. Your phrases are quite amazing: 'Earth was facing alone the fury of storm, / Suddenly raindrops came to pay their toll. / From the eyes of sky tears started to fall, / And he found them very hard to hold.' - 'the eyes of the sky' - such a wonderful way of describing the sky (though for a while I shall now see the sky staring down at me!)

You write so fluently and fluidly, each line flowing in fine metre and emotion. Thank you for sharing your words .

[O!]

This is so very creative.......it makes a lovely tale to tell..........im left sad reading this.....im usually ARGH! when it rains coz where i live it rains almost always throughout the year...............but now i will look at it differently....

THanks....!

x,
O!

[Rain]

First of all, I read your profile, and was stunned at the closeness I felt to your words. This piece is a work of art. It has such a beautifully poignant perception of simple rain. I definately be reading more of your work. You have a new fan in me. Rain..

[Together]

I never ever thought of Rain ever like this, Very thoughtgful and tragic is it.

[Brianna Brie]

Another masterpiece by you. One to ponder...how does this relate to humans? Like the way you brought the rain to life. Superb!

[None]

Great writing to showcase rain in a special way!