But you still have whole of me...

Acrostic

 

 

 

 

 

But… you still have whole of me…

 

 

Between battlegrounds is where I stand,

Unarmed and without any reason to live,

Thirsty for some rain to hit this burning land…

 

 

You gave me a new light every time,

Of which I'm so much missing is your shine,

Unconsciously here I wait for the end of my life…

 

 

Still maintaining a hope for this life is an art,

This endless pain silently kills me every night.

I wonder how you could survive inside of my heart,

Laceration of my feelings I hopelessly need to abide.

Like a piece of paper you are tearing me apart...

 

 

Hollow is my soul and eyes are so wet,

A heart so much empty for which I regret.

Veins still alive with blood which is so cold,

Every tear inside myself I need to hold...

 

 

Wounds of this life won't heal so soon,

Heartless feel with which I belong.

Overcast somewhere I still see my moon,

Lodestar can't even guide my way home.

Evanescently I surrender life of my own…

 

 

Oscillates your presence still on my mind,

Forever I know you'll stay here by my side.

 

 

Misdeed I committed but I'm so amaze to see,

Endlessly here I'm alive but…you still have whole of me…….

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Amanda]

i know how you feel, my friend....though i was the one that left my relationship, i still feel the same way. sometimes, no matter what happens in life and in any relationship, things happen and sometimes not always for the best. for me, it was for the best, even though i feel at times that if things had been different, i would have stayed. i have no regrets only that it didn't work out the way i wanted it to.

i hope that the pain will subside in time, but it is always the best medicine, time is.

nice, but very sad write.....

Always,

Amanda

[The Tao of Bri]

OMG... this is excellent..so how I feel right now.. great write!

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Mm-mm-mm, all I can say is WOW. This acrostic is just amazing and it flows wonderfully. Awesome write!!!

Heather

[Kevin Andros]

Kind of thing that you should get over with. Though that will remain to be seen that you will still be able to write such wonderful peices or not. He he..

This is a great write and will have the 1st prize in Acrostic poems contest. I think so.. he he

good luck!

~KA~

[Zane Mathias]

Hey Gret write! full of emotions and provoking thought.twisting in is a wide variety of power house lines for EX:A heart so much empty for which I regret.

Veins still alive with blood which is so cold love those lines. Keep Up the GReat writes! B.P.

[Karrar]

I must say....its really a magical way in which you portray your emotions...and indeed one can feel how strongly these emotions have emerged from the bottom of your heart. Incredible.

[Marina]

Wow.
This is a great poem.

Thankyou for posting!

XxStaySweet,
Rinaa

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

I wish I could feel the passion of love you express in your writing. I think my own hear ti black. This piece has such conviction and devotion. Well written.

[Partha]

A great poem from beginning to end especially the conclusive lines were brilliant. pain, depression and loneliness is nicely conveyed in the poem. A good read.

[Natasha Ashway]

Beautiful, beautiful bleeding heart! I like the words, the way you cleverly coin BUT YOU STILL HAVE WHOLE OF ME...
The picture's are nice too. As usual!
I think it would be really nice to hear your recitations. I think you are very empathic and your voice will convey this deep emotion even more than words.
Thank you for sharing!
Highest regards....+

[emmajoy]

Beautiful words, beautiful presentation. To use this form - an acrostic sentence - is incredible..

'Hollow is my soul and eyes are so wet,
A heart so much empty for which I regret.
Veins still alive with blood which is so cold,
Every tear inside myself I need to hold.'

Such emotion deserves a happy future, sharing with another heart. Always hope

Thank you for sharing.