But you still have whole of me...

Acrostic

 

 

 

 

 

But… you still have whole of me…

 

 

Between battlegrounds is where I stand,

Unarmed and without any reason to live,

Thirsty for some rain to hit this burning land…

 

 

You gave me a new light every time,

Of which I'm so much missing is your shine,

Unconsciously here I wait for the end of my life…

 

 

Still maintaining a hope for this life is an art,

This endless pain silently kills me every night.

I wonder how you could survive inside of my heart,

Laceration of my feelings I hopelessly need to abide.

Like a piece of paper you are tearing me apart...

 

 

Hollow is my soul and eyes are so wet,

A heart so much empty for which I regret.

Veins still alive with blood which is so cold,

Every tear inside myself I need to hold...

 

 

Wounds of this life won't heal so soon,

Heartless feel with which I belong.

Overcast somewhere I still see my moon,

Lodestar can't even guide my way home.

Evanescently I surrender life of my own…

 

 

Oscillates your presence still on my mind,

Forever I know you'll stay here by my side.

 

 

Misdeed I committed but I'm so amaze to see,

Endlessly here I'm alive but…you still have whole of me…….

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Amanda]

i know how you feel, my friend....though i was the one that left my relationship, i still feel the same way. sometimes, no matter what happens in life and in any relationship, things happen and sometimes not always for the best. for me, it was for the best, even though i feel at times that if things had been different, i would have stayed. i have no regrets only that it didn't work out the way i wanted it to.

i hope that the pain will subside in time, but it is always the best medicine, time is.

nice, but very sad write.....

Always,

Amanda

[Cam]

Aye, it is such a terrible thing to do, but hard to stop no? But back tot he writing,

"Still maintaining a hope for this life is an art,
This endless pain silently kills me every night.
I wonder how you could survive inside of my heart,
Laceration of my feelings I hopelessly need to abide.
Like a piece of paper you are tearing me apart..."

I like what you have said in this stanza.
it is isn't it, and it feels like the pain never ends I agree.

And the surviving inside your heart, I love that, It's like.... It shouldn't still be there... but it is.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Thankyou for sharing so much depth of soul and heart. I understand the longing you express so well - I am empathetic to the situation you so adeptely present here. Lovely ode although melancholic in tone it is truly beautiful. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Miss Prince]

I was confused by the title at first, since it's a little awkward, the word "whole" being awkward in the first place. But I like this a lot. Very honest and understanding. Sad, but well written. I give you kudos for your acrostic ability too. I suck at acrostic.

[LlamaLord]

Hm... very very nice read. This really made me think about how you feel when you have lost someone. Thanks for posting this, always enjoy your work :)

[Rain]

I liked this piece. There's something about the love we let get away, for whatever reason, that seems to haunt us. I've seen it happen so many times, even with myself. Had we stayed together, I'm sure reality would brush away our unrealistic images. Very good! Rain..

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This is incredible work. I am new here and this is one of the first pieces I've read. I look forward to reading more. Very sad but beautiful.

Blessings,

Lucy

[Frank Terino]

This is an amazing piece of work, with heart and soul, the acrostic design adds the perfect touch.
I really enjoyed reading this, thanks.

[Helena]

"But� you still have whole of me�" Strong title that set the tone for the rest of this marvelous acrostic.

I read such a lot of pain in this my friend and a reluctance to let go....but that's ok, you don't have to just yet, its not time. Sure it is hard, been there done that!

Its just a healing process that can't be forced, you will swing back and forth like a pendulum for as
long as it takes....that's just the grieving process. Go with the process, let the tears flow....get angry,
get sad, feel like you are never going to get out of it, IT's OK! Emotions are to be felt, feel everything, and keep writing through your pain, it will get easier, trust me.

Once again this was very well written...

Take care of you!

Helena :)

[Angel Baby]

It's better to have loved than to have not loved at all ...as the saying goes. So what if " she still have the whole of me" it was something that made you feel alive and made you smile....it gave you good and pleasant memories....cherish them, enjoy them....it just a part of your life that helped your learn to grow as a person. This was a beautiful write, happy that you shared it with me. PW

[SN]

This is just...so beautiful. I've been staring at the poem for the past 10 mins. Thank you for sharing. This poem has completely absorbed me into it. Great write!