But you still have whole of me...

Acrostic

 

 

 

 

 

But… you still have whole of me…

 

 

Between battlegrounds is where I stand,

Unarmed and without any reason to live,

Thirsty for some rain to hit this burning land…

 

 

You gave me a new light every time,

Of which I'm so much missing is your shine,

Unconsciously here I wait for the end of my life…

 

 

Still maintaining a hope for this life is an art,

This endless pain silently kills me every night.

I wonder how you could survive inside of my heart,

Laceration of my feelings I hopelessly need to abide.

Like a piece of paper you are tearing me apart...

 

 

Hollow is my soul and eyes are so wet,

A heart so much empty for which I regret.

Veins still alive with blood which is so cold,

Every tear inside myself I need to hold...

 

 

Wounds of this life won't heal so soon,

Heartless feel with which I belong.

Overcast somewhere I still see my moon,

Lodestar can't even guide my way home.

Evanescently I surrender life of my own…

 

 

Oscillates your presence still on my mind,

Forever I know you'll stay here by my side.

 

 

Misdeed I committed but I'm so amaze to see,

Endlessly here I'm alive but…you still have whole of me…….

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Amanda]

i know how you feel, my friend....though i was the one that left my relationship, i still feel the same way. sometimes, no matter what happens in life and in any relationship, things happen and sometimes not always for the best. for me, it was for the best, even though i feel at times that if things had been different, i would have stayed. i have no regrets only that it didn't work out the way i wanted it to.

i hope that the pain will subside in time, but it is always the best medicine, time is.

nice, but very sad write.....

Always,

Amanda

[..]

i have been there a time or two i know this feeling oh so well...

[StacyPerry]

I almost expected "HOLD" instead, but you did a good job on this one without using the word.

I found it interesting actually, lol. I mean you have a nice style of writing. Made me smile too....some times that isn't easy to do. Thank you.

[Beatles9322]

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[Emily Paige]

your an amazing writer

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Interesting thoughts that you have penned in this one...When one is in love it is hard to walk away....It takes time for the love to be placed where it needs to be in the past...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sunflower

[Alicante lullaby]

Unique and so very expressive...very passionate one.

[JENY]

Bhavya.....
while going through the poem.....
A familiar emotion strikes...me....
You carried my mind to....a place....
where my love ......abides..for me....
and he will be saying the same....."You will.....have the..."
Bhavya.....Nice....!!!

[poetic soul]

WOW!!!
this is such an amazing way to tell someone they still have the whole of you....written splendidly...loved the read...

:) Love,
Krishna

[MagiCrystal]

I 'll will be the one handing out the White Roses.. and the Endless music when I died.. I want to