You are still the one...

You are still the one...

A Poem by Bhavya Kaushik
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YOU ARE STILL THE ONE…

 

 

You were the one that I've always wanted,

We started it so well but it soon was ended.

 

Your love gave me hope and a new life to live,

I committed a mistake of loving you which I can't forgive.

 

 

For you I died every second with this frozen heart,

As you went with someone else and left me apart.

 

 

We started it so well but it soon was ended,

But you are still the one that I've always wanted...

 

 

© 2009 Bhavya Kaushik


Author's Note

Bhavya Kaushik
:'(
(I clicked the second pic from the video of that song "Apologize" lolz.. :D :D )

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Pain is pain, nomatter in what so ever form it comes! Great work dude.

Posted 16 Years Ago


Again, its your signature kind of poetry! You are a master of writing these kinds of poem bhavya.

Posted 16 Years Ago


Short but so powerful!

Posted 16 Years Ago


It is sad. It is hard to understand why people grow so close and then waist it. But I see where the other one waisted you built a heart felt poem. This is not a waist but a creative account. Thanks

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

:) Nice poem.

Lol. I like that song as well.

Posted 16 Years Ago


Wow...what a great first picture. Like your words for they feel sincere. Would love to see this as a longer piece alternating between pictures and your lovely words.

Posted 16 Years Ago


Just one suggestion for the line: "We started it so well but it soon got ended," -I think you should take out "got", would sound a lot better.

Other than that, I enjoyed this piece having just gone through something similiar after a 5 year relationship. Wonderful write.

Posted 16 Years Ago


Awe, my dear.... What can one say? Except... there are many, many, people in this World...
Women who want to love you, who are grateful to have met you... Sweet Bhavya, let go,
love, and discover someone worthy of you...

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A good poem, but your grammer is a bit lacking.

"You were the one that I've ever wanted," => "You were the one that I've always wanted"
"We started it so well but it soon got ended." => "We started it so well but it soon was ended."
"But you are still the one that I've ever wanted..." => "But you are still the one I've always wanted".

Posted 16 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love, what a weird and often wicked creature... Great write, congrats on the win!

jkb

Posted 16 Years Ago



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