I DIED inside tonight..

Life has no rewinds and forwards, It unfolds itself at its own pace. So never miss a chance to live it..or else you may die inside :)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I DIED INSIDE TONIGHT..

 

I thought of crying tonight…

But I can't…As…

You may know that weakness inside…

Since tears never came from these eyes…

 

I thought of smiling tonight…

But I can't…As…

I'm sick from this fakeness of mine…

With every second my heart's dying…

 

I thought of breathing tonight…

But I can't…As…

I'm surrounded with this unreal air….

Relief is something which I can't find…

 

I thought of loving someone else tonight…

But I can't…As…

My heart is still not with me…

And I know where it can be…

 

I thought of living my life tonight…

But I can't…As…

My soul is still living for you…

Which yours never cared to do…

 

I can't cry…

I can't smile…

I can't breathe…

I can't love…

I can't even Live…

So…I silently closed these eyes…

And…Yes…Finally….

 

I died inside tonight...

I died inside tonight....

 

 

 

Author's Note

aaaahmmmm!!! Just a collection of few random thoughts! :)

Reviews

[!!..Love..!!]

I found the piece very Deep and real describing your futile search for some love, life, smile and tears but unfortunately when you found yourself so alone you better decided to die, as it better to die than to live a disgusting life like this! I also found that the piece is somehow full of rage and anger. But the literal and lyrical flow of the piece is really tremendous and thus making it such a powerful write. Beautiful indeed!

!!!...Love...!!!

[Innocent]

This is not just random thoughts but actually are sad and deep random thoughts!
I found as if its me in the piece who was actually searching for different reasons to live but finally left me only the option of death and thus silently died.
Sad and beautiful.

[Sr.phil]

dam! so sad, so much pain...I LIKE IT!

[Fantasyfairy]

Wow. Random thoughts indeed. This is a beautiful and dark poem. SO full of emotion and passion, yet also very dark. You have a unique style and the visions that you add to your poem make it even better. XX

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

I like this one a lot. The randomness you speak of doesn't seem random at all. It flows very nice.
Love All, Mejasha

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

Very powerful. The style you've used works very well in this piece.

[Dani California]

Wow!! This is marvelous! So creatively expressed and well written. Strong emotion.... great flow. Loved it.

Excellent work!

[Daisy]

A great use of colour and certain important words really stand out. Thought the final part in blue was really sad though.

[Kevin Andros]

There you go. 10th review. Sorry for taking so long to get here, I must apolosize for the delay. Yes, here is one more Bhavya Kaushik's work. You may not even need the copyright, any person reading this would know that this is the work of Bhavya Kaushik, the work of depression in perfection. Working a lot, reading great, feels very heavy, and the touch of garnishing done by your photographs and the decorative fonts and italics and colored letters. Sense of the color from the 'black and white' poem. I wonder why you do so. Maybe to give a colorful illusion to the reader perhaps? Maybe. Anyway, Loved this work of perfection,

I can't as..........

this line has been used in a such a cool manner! And I'm not just saying that. I am going to be very presice and accurate with my reviews from now on. And I agree with Natasha Aswhe and Siennaskeleton that this will make a very very cool rock song. This is what I have been lacking in my band. A cool Lyrist. Think you can write for Kevin 'n' Jeet? I've given up writing songs now.

All in all, A superb composition. You have my wishes. Keep up the good work ~KA~

[Siennaskeleton]

I loved it...you can really feel the hurt and I couldn't stop reading it...in fact I read it a couple times lol...would you mind if used this just for personal use just to try to put guitar with it...I can almost hear rythym and I think it would be beautiful song

[Natasha Ashway]

Sad random thoughts they are! This piece is so earnest, sincere and real.

'I thought of _____ tonight�
But I can't�As�'

Those words, over and over again emphasize the hurt. We all know the pinned to the moment feeling of intense pain or sadness.
It reads like rock song lyrics. There's a definite beat. Maybe a tune too?

Nice. Thanks for sharing! x