Valentines day

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

VALENTINES DAY...


I saw some old greeting cards...
having different shapes of your heart...
so..I started tearing them without any last...
yes...I'm tearing them apart..
because its valentines day today...
yes..its valentines day today..
the day when you left me away...


I saw some chocolates which you gave me..
on last valentines day...
Its even not me who messed up that way...
so...I started melting those chocolates..
yes..I'm melting these chocolates...
which you gave me near those college gates...
because...its valentines day today...
the day when you left me away....


I saw some red roses which once I gave you...
when I wanted you to be more than my friend...
as..we already knew each other...
since we were nine or ten...
so...I started crushing those roses...
yes....I'll crush them till they dry as hay...
because..its valentines day today...
the day when you left me away....


I then saw on a page written XXXXX
I felt distressed...as I even don't wanna see your name
Seems like..a black cloud has covered this sky..
and...now..I only and only...wanna die....
so....I started burning that page...
yes..I'm burning it with full rage...
because...its valentines day today...
the day when you left me away...


I just don't wanna breathe this day's air..
as...you are nowhere..you are nowhere
and ..this day itself is tearing us...
yes...its tearing both of us apart....
because..its valentines day...
the day..when you broke my heart...
yes...its valentines day...
the day..when you left me away...

 

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this piece specially for some person..but then I haven't mentioned her name here...and only wrote a "XXXXX" in place of her name..as according to me...its against the dignity of that girl..!!

please..bear with it..

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

Hearts ApartJan 13, 2008 - Feb 21, 2008

Please enter this poem in my contest. Distress of love loss and rage show through nicely in your original piece of writing. I like it a lot.

[Innocent]

Seems like you are making a different style statement of your own with these pics(which all are really too good)
But I'm still confused why you got this pic of red rose down here...may be to draw irony ..or may be not!
But, this entire sense of frustration has been beautifully explained in it and it is certainly a dark write.
But beautiful too.

[~crazy Beautiful~]

so utterly sad and painful thing to write about, you do it well
i felt your emotions as i read
i watched upi tear apart the cards she gave you
i watched you bannish her from your heart, to never cause pain again
My favorite I saw some red roses which once I gave you...
when I wanted you to be more than my friend...
as..we already knew each other...
since we were nine or ten...
so...I started crushing those roses...
yes....I'll crush them till they dry as hay...
because..its valentines day today...
the day when you left me away...."
Beautiful
thank you for entering my contest
"

[Wulfstan Crumble]

I applaud your manners in showing dignity to the girl. Youve articulated a good poem full of emotion here. I hope writing the poem was theraputic.

[Sr.phil]

oh man, i loved it!

[Imperfection]

I did go through this one before but thought I would come back another time and review it because I could not think of words to put down here.
Your reaction is understandable. But did it make you feel better or worse?

[April Child]

I have felt like this and I did what you are doing, I wrote about it. Some good images here, the crushing of the roses, melting of the chocolates, tearing the cards and the feelings of hurt and anger come through strong. Sad content but well conveyed.

[AK]

A very passionate piece, this. I hope next Valentine's Day is better for you.

[Another Word-Lover]

i love this poem.. it is a great peice of writing.. the pain and hurt are really there and can be clearly seen through your words.. and i know how hard it is to try to forget an old love.. you'll do anything to get them out of ur mind and heart and it is a painful process..
and i respect the fact that u didnt mention the name of that girl..
good piece :-)

[Carla (trying to make e..]

very emotional piece.
very descriptive and emotionally repetitive...which is good here....good here...
i really liked it.
keep up the writing.
thanks for entering my contest.
Carla