Valentines day

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

VALENTINES DAY...


I saw some old greeting cards...
having different shapes of your heart...
so..I started tearing them without any last...
yes...I'm tearing them apart..
because its valentines day today...
yes..its valentines day today..
the day when you left me away...


I saw some chocolates which you gave me..
on last valentines day...
Its even not me who messed up that way...
so...I started melting those chocolates..
yes..I'm melting these chocolates...
which you gave me near those college gates...
because...its valentines day today...
the day when you left me away....


I saw some red roses which once I gave you...
when I wanted you to be more than my friend...
as..we already knew each other...
since we were nine or ten...
so...I started crushing those roses...
yes....I'll crush them till they dry as hay...
because..its valentines day today...
the day when you left me away....


I then saw on a page written XXXXX
I felt distressed...as I even don't wanna see your name
Seems like..a black cloud has covered this sky..
and...now..I only and only...wanna die....
so....I started burning that page...
yes..I'm burning it with full rage...
because...its valentines day today...
the day when you left me away...


I just don't wanna breathe this day's air..
as...you are nowhere..you are nowhere
and ..this day itself is tearing us...
yes...its tearing both of us apart....
because..its valentines day...
the day..when you broke my heart...
yes...its valentines day...
the day..when you left me away...

 

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this piece specially for some person..but then I haven't mentioned her name here...and only wrote a "XXXXX" in place of her name..as according to me...its against the dignity of that girl..!!

please..bear with it..

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

Hearts ApartJan 13, 2008 - Feb 21, 2008

Please enter this poem in my contest. Distress of love loss and rage show through nicely in your original piece of writing. I like it a lot.

[Midnight Dreams]

I can relate to this poem of yours. Great Work Bhavya!

[Karl]

The picture is just lovely, isn't it?

[Roxy]

This is really very dark and personal, One of my personal favorite from all the poems written by you.

[Together]

This is deep, dark and most importantly so personal!

[Rosary]

i like it the usee of xxxx seems to go perfect with the piece

[Jazlean]

awww...I really liked this piece, the repition of the layout of each stanza worked well and kept it flowing nicely and the emotion that poured from it stunning. Peoms like this can never be easy to write and I commend you, breaking up on such a day is so sad. For me it's always just been my birthday but I have always hoped of getting more than just birthday cards, haven't as of yet but perhaps one day.
great write, I enjoyed it.
well done.
~Jaz.

P.S. good on you for not naming names
P.P.S. the images worked nicely with this

[Forest Green]

It's a painful moment when the point of no return has arrived. Love reaches its dead zone.

Well done, and yes no names is the best way to go...;)

Daniel

[Golden]

Distress of love loss and rage show through nicely in your original piece of writing. I like it a lot.Beautifully sad.

[Blue Rose]

because..its valentines day today...
the day when you left me away...."
So deep and intense..isn't it.
I wish for your well being.
Hope everything' is better now :)

[Blackbeats]

Very impressive!
I liked the last paragraph a lot and it's nice that you didn't mentioned the name of that girl.
Nice