I waited in the RAIN!!

This piece describes the endless wait of a person for true love...but unfortunately its something which never ever came..

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I WAITED IN THE RAIN…

 

I looked outside from my window pane….

A black cloud was heavily pouring rain….

But there was a promise to maintain…

So I went outside and stood behind that train…

That black cloud was still pouring rain…

Many people gone and many came again…

Some laughed and some thought I’m out of my brain…

That black cloud was still pouring rain…

But there was a promise to maintain….

So I stood behind that old train…

I waited…I waited…But…

You never came…

But… you never came…

 

A tear poured out of my eyes…

Thinking about our past lives…

Something penetrated deep inside my soul…

My heart...oh!! My heart beat no more...

My search was futile for you to find…

It’s something which I can’t hide…

I remember that promise to be together till the moment we die…

See...everything is just same here…except you and I…

People say that time has its own way….

So I waited and waited through nights and days…

But...you never came…

 

That very black cloud was still pouring rain…

But there was a promise to maintain….

So I stood behind that old train…

People thought I’m out of my brain…

Many gone and many came again…

That black cloud was still pouring rain…

I waited and waited…

But…you never came …

You never came …

 

My heart just thought of cursing you…

But it’s something which I can’t do…

I felt something on my hand…It was a little bird…

And first time in my life…I felt out of my words….

I looked upon that deep blue sky…

And the sound of rain acted as a lullaby…

I then saw a building of huge height…

As if it was hiding all my life’s light…

 

 

That very black cloud was still pouring rain…

But there was a promise to maintain….

So I stood behind that old train…

People thought I’m out of my brain…

Many gone and many came again…

That black cloud was still pouring rain…

I waited and waited…

But…you never came …

You never came …

 

 

Tears started flowing down my face….

Since it was dark, so no one glanced…

My body soaked away…

But these tears are finding their new way….

And I thought of giving myself a smile…

But it’s something which I can’t do in this life…

 

That very black cloud was still pouring rain…

But there was a promise to maintain….

So I stood behind that old train…

People thought I’m out of my brain…

Many gone and many came again…

That black cloud was still pouring rain…

I waited and waited…

But…you never came …

You never came …

 

And…my heart broke that night…

But…but…you never came…

You never came…

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

ok! First of all to be clear this piece is actually a Song lyric...

And the fact that I literally stood there in the rain that day...yeah...This isn't a metaphor...
As� Sometimes we used to do many foolish things just to maintain some promises...
The same thing happened with me that day...When I waited for someone very long and stood there in the rain�But unfortunately my heart broke that night but she never came�
This one's damn close to my heart because it�s a "REAL" one :)

Reviews

[!!..Love..!!]

Oh!! My gosh!! This is such a terrific piece. So sad ..I can see a tear in each and every line of your piece. At least, it brought tears to my eyes. Its is beautifully and uniquely sad and Thats the real strength of your piece. And also lovely repetition of few lines. It just makes the entire piece linger a lot and If its a lyric then I need to admit that it's the most powerful and heart break song I've ever read.
I mean what a emotion and such a beautiful write which can melt any one's eyes.
I don't know ..is it like you stood in the rain at that day or its simply a metaphor...But you've conveyed your feelings very well..


"And...my heart broke that night...
But....but...you never came...
You never came..."

I also felt that every "...." (dots) made it felt like you were so hurt and broken from this endless wait that you couldn't say the sentence out properly
like after crying... broken and hurt..I mean for me this is such a emotional and beautiful poem.

The best I've read in Writer's cafe till date.
and..Its true..

I would kill to have this much of skill of creating such a beautiful piece which can bring tears in anyone's eyes( at least It brought tears to mine)

"This piece describes the endless wait of a person for true love...but unfortunately its something which never ever came."
Very very well description you gave here of your piece.
Lovely indeed..
Awesome and a superb read..
Thanks a lot..thanks a ton for posting it here and for sharing it with all of us..
You just keep writing man!

[Karrar]

This poem signifies the truth...that when the heart cries....it devises a poem of such saddening proportions that one cannot practically 'THINK' it up...it is evident that the author of this peom was not your brain....but the core of your heart....

[Laura E. Aranda]

WoW
Very emotional work! Congrats on the Make Me Cry AwARd
Cheers and tissues to you, Lea

[Together]

This is my favorite poem wirtten by you, simply outstanding!

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Sometimes I think the poems about real life and our own expeirences make the best poems and songs!! i should know! every poem/song I write is deaing with a personal trauma or triumph, it's my "catharsis" so to say. You are a very good strong writer, and I can see why this one got first place.

thanks.

kena

[Jaffa Forbes]

Well it's certainly heartfelt. I expect this would make a great song! Good stuff.
Jaff :)

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

.....wow. This piece is so sad but amazingly written. A fabulous lyric indeed and I really loved it. Awesome work!!!

Heather

[Dalaina Renee]

I felt that way about my divorce, he was suppose to come find me in the rain. But he never did. Still hasn't....great poem!

[Mr. Lopez]

This write was exceptional. As you know art mimics reality and there is beauty in the pains of love. Excellent work !!

Mr. Lopez

[deeps]

No words to express..it just made me cry..simply superb piece of writing..

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

I feel for you with this true occurence - how heartwrenching. I see the resemblance that you spoke of in the longing for something to be yet it does not come to fruition as we hope that it will. I hope that you are smiling now and have found solace. Your words certainly must be a therapy to get such heartfelt emotion and heartbreak out of yourself and onto the page. Wonderful lyrics - melancholic tune. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha