And thats how I became a FAKE!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

AND…THAT’S HOW I BECAME A "FAKE"

 

 

I always used to lie awake at night…
Searching for the real person inside…
But I never found myself back….
And that’s how I became a fake…

Oh! My heart doesn’t beat right…
And increasing my pain every night….
I can’t get you out of my sight…
I’m living without any hope of light…

I know I can’t turn back time...
But I really want you back in my life…
So…for that reason I gave you “whole of me”…
To be the kind of person you want me to be…
But you never returned me myself back...
And that’s how….Yes that’s how…
I became a FAKE…

But I never pretended that I’m broken inside…
Always tried to give a false smile from outside…
And let no one know the story of some thousand tears….
Behind that single smile of mine…
I still remember that day when I gave you “whole of me”…
To be the kind of person you want me to be…..
But you never returned me myself back…
And that’s how…yes that’s how….
I became a FAKE….

And…Still I shed a tear every night…
Still searching for the real person inside…
But I can’t find myself back….
And I think so…now you know…
How I became a FAKE…
Why you never returned me myself back??
And that’s why…and yes that’s why...
I became such a FAKE…..
I became such a FAKE…

 

 

Reviews

[Carole]

But I never pretended that I'm broken inside�
Always tried to give a false smile from outside�
And let no one know the story of some thousand tears�.
Behind that single smile of mine�
I still remember that day when I gave you "whole of me"�
To be the kind of person you want me to be�..
But you never returned me myself back�
And that's how�yes that's how�.
I became a FAKE�.

So many people can relate to this, Bhavya. I wrote a story entitled, "Taking Off the Mask of Pretense" and a poem called "Behind the Smile" you might want to read when you have a moment... Not sure if you have ever read them, but they both made me think of some of this write. It is so easy to pretend and to hide how we are really feeling, putting on the "fake smile" while we are dieing inside. Repressing our feelings is so easy to do. The sad thing is that it tends to come out in other ways.

You have pegged emotions so many of us can relate to. Well done!

[munch]

wow yaar the poem describin feelings that i atleast feel every night
the best lines i felt are
cos i do this every day every sec
i can feel u r feelin

But I never pretended that I'm broken inside�

Always tried to give a false smile from outside�

And let no one know the story of some thousand tears�.

Behind that single smile of mine�


great work my frnd

[Kevin Andros]

Well, as usual, this is another big bang you pulled out of your bag. An awsome composition my friend. But as I've told you almost hundred times, try something different, or else specialise in this area itself. You should continue writing the novel you are writing and get yourself encouraged. Say that you are real enough, not FAKE! ~KA~

[blacksky45]

its strong in some parts and weak in others. it could use some touching up here and there. like add some more figurative language. its still a good poem though. keep writing!