Story of my LIFE..

Every LIFE has a STORY...of its own!!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

STORY OF MY LIFE…..

 

 

 

 

I came on this world crying,

The peaceful lap of my mother….

That’s where I was lying…

I grew up and came across with different stages of my life…

Having exotic dreams on these innocent eyes…

When I was a kid I still remember….

How I managed to build hundreds of castles…

Or may be of some endless numbers….

Yet I decided what I wanna be…

But never knew how much it gonna cost me…

Gradually I entered my teen….

Where I got thousand wounded knees….

At one point of time…I was feeling hopeless inside…

And at the same time…..

I was figuring out the greatest problems of my life…..

At this time only…

I got some scars that will never gonna heal…

Some pains which are just too real…

But I still decided to carry on…

With same innocent dreams….but…

Not with those same innocent eyes…

May be I was grown…..or the reason may be something else….

But I still decided to carry on……

Now I found myself climbing up that hill…

Where I found my dreams to be fulfilled…

I reached to its top and took a deep breath…

And was astonished by my journey…..

I found that I was many time crushed…

Broken, fouled, wounded but still trusted …

I was crucified and fall upon the thorns of life….

But seems like... that was only my immortal sacrifice….

And I can proudly say...of whom Iam today…

I never ever lost the real value of mine….

Yet I came on this world crying…..

But will gonna leave it with laughter and joys of mine…

And will only gonna miss my "innocent" eyes………………………

So……

This was all….

The Story of my Life….

This was all….

The Story of my Life….

 

 

 

Reviews

[!!..Love..!!]

This is such a mature piece Bhavya!
and I never knew that you have so much maturity in such a age. Your works speak for itself which is a sense of pride for you..I'm sure!

Even..I was getting flashbacks of my own life while reading it and thus made me nostalgic.

The usage of "innocent eyes" and the feel is according to me the real power of the poetry...

[Vaishali..^_^]

wow...!its very good..!!


Where I got thousand wounded knees�.
At one point of time�I was feeling hopeless inside�
And at the same time�..
I was figuring out the greatest problems of my life�..
At this time only�
I got some scars that will never gonna heal�
Some pains which are just too real�
But I still decided to carry on�

i just love these lines...!!it's so thoughtful..^_^

[Karl]

I liked it, infact I loved it

[Imperfection]

This is very simply presented...no big words, nor lacy language or breathtakingly beautiful metaphors and yet the emotions conveyed travel deep into the heart. Because this piece is so real and because this is a part of you.

I agree with another reviewer that the reference to the innocent eyes throughout is a special part of this piece. As we grow up and learn more and more about life, we gain a lot but we lose our innocence.

And yes, I loved the quote at the end.

May I dare to share a quote (author unknown) with the person with an awesome collection of quotes..?
;-)
'When childhood dies, the corpse is called an adult'

Good piece of writing. Very thought-provoking.

[Together]

oh! This is really very thoughtful!

[Roxy]

Every life has a story and every story has an ending.
Such a beautiful quote.Isn't it.
There is so much wisdom and intensity in you work.
I loved it

[Golden]

I liked the reference of innocent eyes and the loss in the write
Great work.

[Blue Rose]

Great write:)

[Blackbeats]

Very very mature piece and I loved the first quote.
Cheers dude!

[Innocent]

AAhmm!! there is so much maturity in your writes.
I liked this sense of wisdom in your works and even the quotes too.
Brilliant!

[~crazy Beautiful~]

this is absolutely beautiful writing
It took me back to those days
i love the quotes before and after
it sets the scene for the piece
the ups and downs of life
nice work
thank you for entering my contest